Reviews for Unfair
Ty chapter 1 . 11/5/2005
Shows deep emotion, effective word use. It works well.
SoftShadow chapter 1 . 11/2/2005
i like the flow, but i feel it is a bit distrupted with the last line, 'it's tearing me apart' i think you might want to add a space the italicise that line, just an ideabesides that i like it
L0st.S0uL chapter 1 . 11/2/2005
i like the second stanza.. i agree smiling isnt very easy... it isnt something that comes very oftern and naturally either