Hey, no prob. You can have my muse. I have so many of them I can never get anything done. XD

On to the story...

Well written, I thought. You introduce the characters and the setting, which is the main importance of the prologue, along with a bit of prose that was in there, too. It definitely sharpens my appetite for the rest of the story. Lovely details, great grasp of pain. Looking forward to reading more when I have time. Ciao!

-Holli!

Well, someone's inclined to infanticide. Damned dark ages.

I was hoping they'd secretly adopt the child. She's eyes like those of a friend of mine. They're quite disconcerting in true life. (To the point were I shiver when she makes a certain face at me. She uses that to her advantage. Incessantly.)

Hope the girl doesn't become quite as creepy in her later years as my friend seems to be- though I suppose I'd love her more for it. Looking forward to an update.

-simpleton.

(btw) how big's that hand of god supposed to be?

I read the first few paragraphs and was somehow reminded of the acclaimed thriller "perfume" by German write Patrick Sueskind.

What with the rancour of the city and the child born cursed- well, there were some subtle similarities.

Fortunately for the babe in your story, the mother's not inclined to infanticide, as the sueskind's creature's was.

I enjoyed this.

I do feel however, that it would benefit from longer paragraps. No need to change what you've writeen- just delete some of the spaces. With dialogue it's appropriate, but when (like in the first bit) the narrative isn't separated every few lines by dialogue, it's safe to mesh the bits togther.

I have that problem- paragraphs always end up very small when I try to write fiction- as if I'm overly anxious to separate my ideas. Still, your fiction, tiny paragraphs or not, is a good deal better than mine (hence my inclination not to post any of it), so I suppose I shouldn't even be comparing.

I apologize for the long and (knowing me) tedious review.

Long story short, good job. I'm off to read the second chapter.

-simpleton

PS. Despite my obvious ineptidue when it comes to brevity, I ought to review you more often, seeing as I really quite enjoy your work...

Awesome. Love your writing style, keep up the good workD

This story put a smile on my face, i love the title and the ending of it. I love your little aurthors note! it made me laugh. anyway please continue writing i would love to see where this story goes.

-Saleinaenachiya

ps. i would appreciate your opinion on my story Thanks!

This seems like it is most definatly going somewhere. I love the title: Very cute, highly original