This is my kind of chapter! The scary stuff! It was cool to read again!

That chapter was stunningly beautiful.

Great! Awesome chapter. Some of your word choice is just stunning. My one problem as of now is that it is the second chapter and you haven't said her name. Just a suggestion so the reader can relate with the character better.

wow, matt

this is amazing

im really interested as to what his "ordeal" is... like, with the whole at night in the woods thing...

which is a good thing, cos it makes the reader interested and hooked!

one day, when u become a famous writer, i want a free signed copy of a book, just cos im so amazing! lolbut seriously, its really good... i love it!

was u keep completing more parts, i want to read them, ok?keep being cool... even if u hav 2 live in a freezer... lol, jk.

love ya!love the sexiest australian u'll ever meet! (haha no)-sarah- xoxox

As you have already heard from me. This is a great story. You have used words to create some beautiful imagery. A few sentences are out of place (I have annotated on my hardcopy). Write more. Nice evolution from the mouthpiece story. I can't wait to see your new ideas.

wow!