|Reviews for Clouds2|
| FunkyFlower chapter 1 . 11/12/2005
beautiful. makes me think of gods and goddesses...greek mythology. love the rhyming and shortness. great job, ~mez~
| ACCOUNT NO LONGER ACTIVE 1 chapter 1 . 11/7/2005
Short and sweet and I can imagine it. Really pretty.
| suckerplucker chapter 1 . 11/7/2005
This is an interesting fragmented image. First of all, it is weakened by the last line- what happens when the night turns into day? are the clouds no longer "gilded chariots" and "bright horses", do they cease to fly, to be "pulled and pushed by the winds"? The nonsensical last line detracts from the , this is a nice image, but what is its aim? What feeling do you wish to evince in the reader? What makes this a poem and not just a pretty word painting?good luck.