Reviews for To Break Me
Anna178 chapter 1 . 11/10/2005
You had some interesting format in this which added a strange effect, but good as well. Well worded and beautiful.

pinhead.gunpowder chapter 1 . 11/8/2005
This is quite a good poem. Hello Nousha, this is Alison by the way. I liked this poem a lot for a few reasons. It's used, again, beautiful imagery (earthquake you arrive blah blah blah..) and the writing is way developed from your first stuff. You've used a different format, and fiddled around with words, and it works great. Constructive critism? Would have to be..using more descriptive words to express ideas and thoughts, feelings etc. That might just be your writing style though..more upfront about it, and not hidden messages. It's still good. We shall discuss this on friday. Did you ask your mom yet?ali
agirlnamed-aly chapter 1 . 11/7/2005
I like the format and then way wrote things to be so dramatic. Really took the full affect.

Keep writing.