Reviews for Makebelieves
gummibared chapter 1 . 11/10/2005
omg! this poem is so awesome! XDby all means *kw* !
Adamn chapter 1 . 11/9/2005
God... this... ROCKS! I love it. It is perfect. I agree though, 'then' does kinda throw off the scheme. 'And the hopeful heart would ask' sounds better to me. 'course it is up to you.
Smoky Bear chapter 1 . 11/9/2005
"With dreams of peace that never fly away on a wisp of smoke." - that's my life, dude!

personally i wouldn't have put the "then" in line 10, it stumbles the flow in my opinion. if anyone flames you for this poem then they're a tit... this is a lovely first piece.
Bri don't feel like logining in chapter 1 . 11/9/2005
YAY! Your poem is awesomeful. Keep up the good work. -.-