wow, so personal and so touching. Some amazing emotive language here and use of imagery. this is going on my favs. 'You are like a candle that mets as it grows' amazing, a sense of love and desperation and loss for something you havent even lost yet. I love it, even if it is a bit on the sad side, keep it up.

I've felt that way about a girl before, twas insane how i really loved her and then was let down, but It seems you know that feeling too... good work.

The "My ..." parts are great they really show a struggle in the relationship! Very nice.

Metaphorical in depth give a great feeling to the reader. Line after line is beautifully written

This is so deep and beautiful. A very moving piece and the emotions are really clear. Well done with this. QueenVixta

one true thing

That was so sweet! -steals- Nah, just joking, but I really loved it..

that is absolutely ... beautiful.

nice work. keep writing.

thank you for the review. i'm caimer now, but still think it's my fault. i don't no if he's in hospital or not, but will try and talk to him tomorow.i dunno if he's talking to me. i'm gonna try and help again thank you.

decaying