Nice job :) I really do think that this story is a comment on modern society. Like the line about "an eight year old examining a christmas present". Love her sarcasm.

oh, and the line "I guess things are so bad on the surface..."

Gold. I really like it. Hope you can continue the story. maybe Adelle sees what others don't and that's why they call her crazy. Once again, wonderful work. :D

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Aw... poor Adelle! I think she just gets into trouble because of what she says (or in some cases, doesn't say). Good story and love the idea! Hope to see more chapters soon!

~Kchan

Damn, I really like this story. Adelle doesn't sound like she's crazy; more like she's incredibly artistic and misunderstood. And your description of the mental institution...damn. If you just made the walls pastel yellow, I would think that you were describing our local hell hole, better known as Memorial Hospital.

I heard about you while I was browsing through the LotR section of (though tecnically, I'm still boycotting it, hence the lack of review). I love Rising Dark because Willow is such a developed character. I had to see what else you could write and I'm incredibly impressed. Please keep writing and post more soon; good writers are becoming an endangered species.

Added you to the good ol' favorites lists and Author Alert. Hope to hear/see/whatever more from you soon!

-Tobira, signed and sealed

I like your narrative viewpoint. I'm sorry this isn't as detailed as I can make it, but right now I haven't really the time to thoroughly analyze anything. I just wanted to say that so far, this is very intriguing and once I get a little more time (which I hope is soon or I'll go crazy) I'll be able to leave more helpful comments. Just keep doing what you're doing.