He must be a great deal smarter than all my guy friends. With them, you've got to spell everything out for them or they have no idea what you're talking about. Rather annoying sometimes. But great when you don't really want them to know what you're talking about but they're there when you're talking to your gal pals. It's even better when you create code names for everything because then they're really lost. How did I start talking about this? What AM I talking about? Goodness...I've lost my train of thought now...

Anyway...what do I write now? You already know what I thought of the chapter...I'm not sure why you're iffy about it. It fills in the story, introduces the Mage, adds to their characters, and progresses the story...Ha HA! I have finally figured out the job of an editor. It's not really about correcting and all that...It's about reassuring the author that it actually is good writing. I have finally found my purpose in life...I know my destiny...Benadryl...Plain and simple...the only way I'm getting to sleep tonight...Definetly Benadryl...It'd probably help if I stopped eating sugar so late at night...hehehehehe...you don't know about that...

nya, someone's in seer denial over here. you should describe why he doesn't want to put his trust in her. i mean i can tell he was betrayed before... that's why she supposedly doesn't mean anything to him.

right, one thing confused me. you called the mage derek in the last chapter and in this, his name was derrick. hmm? lol, don't worry... i change my mind with spellings a lot as well.

keep up the good work. hope to read the next chapter soon. take care, hun. l8er,

~bubblegum

Rad update. I have a feeling there is going to be jealousy and lots of feelings later on.

Oh, wow. That moved a little fast; I think a lot of this is. But it was very well done. I must say that I can see some bad stuff coming up having to do with the Mage. Obviously.

That was very good, but in this chapter I thought you switched the perspectives an awful lot. Maybe if they were longer it might be better. I mean, you could even back track a bit in time. For example, for Ardan's last point of view, you could have him going up to the Mage's quarters, expecting nothing, then storming in on them, then his feelings about it as he gets mad and then he leaves. I think that might be a bit more dramatic, because it certainly was meant to be.

But overall I was quite happy about this chapter. It was very good and I can't wait to see what the next chapter will be like.

Cheers,

-solin

M Gurl! Great update. Im starting to see a triangle...Derrick sounds hot.

Was that spanish you used?

"Tu eres muy fabulosa tambien"

I couldnt figure out what eres was so I looked it up and it was spanish. I figured it out though.

Oh yay! It's getting real exciting!

Derrick isn't afraid of Ardan's threats then?

Update soon, please!

its me againhonestly honestly i feel a real connection with this story, i still didn't finishe telling you everything, i should do that eventually. now what stikes me as rather frivalous (yea i know i spelt that wrong shut up!) is that you know the sound a dying platapus makes? o_O *cough* Caitlin seems a little *cough* impatient if you know what i mean. Vacation is coming yay! we can sit on our asses and eat chocolate and gain 5 pounds haha. how i love the holidays. Introduction of a competitive force for ardan haha me likey. ANGST! PENNIES! anyways see you tomorrow

CHOCOLATE! -stuffs all of it in mouth- hehe. wow she was young when that happened. haha he is so in denial! poor Caitlyn though... THANK YOU FOR UPDATE QUICKLY! -gives even more chocolate then before and Milk and Cookies!- YAY you! update soon!

Haha - I will borrow Ardan and never bring him back... I love his evilness ... which is strange for me...

Oh. *Shivers*

Hehe. Nice chapter!

I like the very beginning. Made me laugh.

I know she might be kind of used to it now, but i think even if i'd seen it a few times an animal speaking would still make me jump. Maybe not.

When Ardan woke up i didn't realise that time had gone forwards, I assumed it had gone back to before Caitlin woke up. That cleared up pretty soon though. NOt really an issue.

Ardan is so tortured. Fabulous.

*Mumbles something involving the words gorgeous ... evil ... teeth ... slobbering ... steal ... hide away ... gorgeous ... ardan, oh*

Yum yum. Update soon, and Merry Christmas! -

I hope it means more but I understand that during the holidays things can be a mess. I really liked this one about how they both seem lost in their own worlds but their worlds are linked. I hope you update again soon! Awesome job

Cute, funny, and a little strange(but what in life isn't?) ...Everything that makes a good story. I really love the story of the beauty and the beast, and this is just so cute. A kind of modern version. I can't wait for the next chapter. Update soon!

lefsa? i must admit I've never heard of lefsa. But there will be cookies if I have anything to do with it. I'll be sure to make you lots of chocolate ones (that way I can have the rest for myself...muahahahahahahahaHAHAHAHAHA!) oh...umm...right. Anyway, did you send this to me to edit? Because I think I got something from you but because I was having problems with my e-mail I haven't been able to open any of my e-mails for the past week or so...If you did, I'm terribly sorry...I haven't yet memorized the e-mail addresses of all the authors I beta for so I'm not sure all who sent me chapters. That was the first thing I checked but alot of my e-mails were deleted. Five of my friends have already called asking why I didn't answer their e-mails. I wonder if it occured to them that I might not have gotten online...Except they kinda know me better than that and they know my life revolves around the internet and especially fictionpress. It really is rather addicting. If you really think about it, there are lots of mysteries to the universe. Like:

What is the point in saying "may I ask" and then follow it up with a question?

Or: When an atheist swears on a Bible before they testify in court do they have to tell the whole truth and nothing but the truth since they don't believe in God? Or what about an agnostic? Since they're not sure does that mean they only have to tell part of the truth?

And: Is it possible to be allergic to water?

And what about: How do "do not walk on grass" signs get there?

And this: Why is it that when adults have multiple personalities it's schizophrenia, but when a child has imaginary friends it's cute? (Still trying to decide whether we're considered an adult or still a child)

And this too: When French people swear do they say pardon my English? Why do we say pardon my French anyway? It's not like we're actually swearing in French...well most of us aren't...

And also: Why is a piano player called a pianist, but a race car driver not called a racist?

And what about: Why do we say something is out of whack? What's a whack anyway?

And this: If lawyers are disbarred and clergymen defrocked, doesn't it follow that electricians can be delighted, musicians denoted, cowboys deranged, models deposed, tree surgeons debarked, and dry cleaners depressed?

And don't forget: Do Lipton Tea employees take coffee breaks?

But really, you don't need the answer to those...Sometimes you just have to remember what the rules of life are.

You only need two tools: WD-40 and Duct tape.

If it doesn't move and it should, use the WD-40.

If it moves and it shouldn't, use the Duct tape.

And that's the end for Bree's pearls of wisdom for the day...

*curtain closes*

very nice story so far :) can't wait for the update!

Yay! Lets hope you update..

tres fabulous update by the way.

This was a wonderful chapter, but it would have been much better if it was longer, with very detailed descriptions of how they feel about everything. I mean, this must be a very traumatizing thing for them, but it's hard to connect with the characters when you don't know how they feel about certain things.

Otherwise, fabulous job. Can't wait until the next chapter!

Cheers,

-solin