|Reviews for The Beast in the Library|
| chibbs chapter 13 . 3/13/2006
lol, is this an actual update? hmm, I must be seeing things, jk, I really like your story, keep it up! umm..you asked the readers if the beast should fall in love so soon. If you are sort of following the usual "beauty and the beast" story line, the beast realizes that he loves her, he just doesnt tell her...right? lol, nvm cant remember.
| codyismypup chapter 13 . 3/12/2006
You are so loved. I Loved the whole Arden-feels ya to pieces. C'MON! UPDATE! I've been waiting for three days!GR!
| Dirty Secret chapter 13 . 3/11/2006
Woot! I was never a great fan of Beauty and The Beast but this story as totally changed it! I love how you moved the story about (and added a whole lot more swearing :D). I think you did a fab job and UPDATE SOON!
| LilLaTLuv chapter 13 . 3/9/2006
GREAT CHAPPIE! UPDATE SOON! PLEASE?
Luv ya,Tashi :)
| Pandemonium Express chapter 13 . 3/9/2006
YAY! Happy updates! _ ...alright, so not exactly 'happy', but you get what I mean...I hope...
Anyways, awesome update. The whole reazing his love so suddenly was okay. It was a bit too...well, it was sudden, but as a reader it didn't feel like an important moment. Just sort of an 'oh...' and then 'okay, moving on' sort of thing. On the other hand, it's a LOT better than the drawn out descriptions and inner monologues that many of the fictionpress stories go through while finding out that they love someone.
Um...in normal speak(ish) I guess I'm TRYING semi-successfully to say that it was pretty good overall. Not perfect, but could be much much worse.
| CrazyDelusional chapter 13 . 3/9/2006
Heh, it seems that was faces are becoming famous! Lol. So updates should be (about a) week? YAY! :D. The chapter was good. Rather short if anything but I didn't see any problems with it. I like the little brother though (even know he wasn't in this chapter). :D
| Whispering.Lies chapter 13 . 3/9/2006
Odang that is good, but u need to maybe describe what is going on more. what happened to josh? will he come and find her? and will ardan stop being a jackass around her, no offense, but he is kinda getting on my nerves when he cant just say something nicer than spitting out nasty , i love it!
| vitreous chapter 13 . 3/9/2006
Wow...I love this story. There weren't a lot of errors that I noticed, more typos than grammatical errors, but nothing really big. Good job! And update soon!
| vitreous chapter 10 . 3/9/2006
I started reading this last night and originally decided that I'd review on the last chapter instead of each individual one..sorry..but it's shorter and when I'm at the end of one chapter I really wanna get to another..but I decided to review here simply because I love the last sentace. lol It's so descriptive.
My heart ached then, as the whispers of her touch breathed fire upon my skin.
Anyway, good job! Now I'm off to the next chapter...
| Plinky chapter 13 . 3/9/2006
Yay, you updated! *Bounces*
Awesome chapter too.
It's weird how you can not update for ages, but I still know exactly what's going on as soon as you do - good storytelling. *Beams*
The description at the beginning was great - really well conveyed atmosphere. The silence really creeped me out.
I thought Ardan's thoughts were really well written, and I loved the way he realised. About whether it was too soon... it seems to flow well within the story - it didn't seem to soon considering how things have been progressing, and it seemed the next natural step. About whether it was realistic from an objective point of view, I'm not the person to ask, lol!
Basically, it didn't make me go, 'that would never happen.' (Actually I gasped, and clapped my hands in glee. I like glee.)
He still hasn't changed... great contrast between what he thought and what he said. So Ardan. Lol.
"She pinched the bridge of her nose and hung down her head." 'hung down her head' sounds a little weird. Maybe 'her head dropped' or something along those lines.
"I could smell the dripping saliva that coated their muzzles and their erratic heartbeats drummed inside my head." Wow. Awesome.
She saved him! She saved him! *Bounces in excitement*
Wow, great chapter. Now they HAVE to spend time together. Yay! And she's going to look after him and make him better and...
One of them's going to mess it up, right? *Raises eyebrow*
Yeah, I thought so.
| codyismypup chapter 13 . 3/9/2006
I dunno, I guess it's just that the flying monkeys were portrayed at evil. Which they are. And also because of the weird hats they Flying Monkeys, Unite!Update or feel the love,avey
| The Slate Reaper chapter 13 . 3/9/2006
Jthm? no, I'm sorry, I don' chapter thought, throughly enjoyed it.
| Emilea chapter 13 . 3/8/2006
so good! im tearing up right now. plz update soon!
| Psycho Parfait chapter 13 . 3/8/2006
*beats Caitlin with a stick* Are you MAD, woman? Can't you tell that you're -both- lusting after each other and just need to get it on like rabbits? T_T You don't need parents, anyway. You have seksii feral-boy. Get over it and pounce him already... eheheh, don't mind me. I LOVE this story, and I LOVE you, and .. I DON'T love Josh and Derrick. No, no, I most certainly do not. But I love you. And your story. And the fact that you made this story. And.. well, I'm pretty sure you get it. This is amazing, and perfect, and (did I mention I love you?) and Beauty and the Beast rawkz my world as it is. This does so even more. Update son before I go crazy. Great job!
| SkepticCritic chapter 13 . 3/8/2006
Grr...It's the most annoying thing...I got the e-mail the morning after you sent it...I read it right then too...And I've had it for all these days trying to send it back...And for some reason it won't let me...I couldn't get my internet connection to stay up long enough to send the e-mail...It was really bugging me...I suppose I'll just have to tell you what I wrote since I can't send because of SOME darn computer...Grr...
A) The tenses keep changing...First you did something and then you're doing something...
B) Isn't it a bit "Beauty and the Beast"? I know this is modeled after it and all, but it might be a bit much...Because if I remember correctly (an admirable feat for me), it was wolves that attacked the Beast when he and Belle and I think her dae when they're in the forest together...Maybe just change it to another kind of animal...You could have coyotes...The portal leads to So Cal after all...Okay well maybe not but you get my point...
C) "His fur now as black as blood," How can she it's as "black as blood" if it was as "black as night" to begin with?
Anyway, no grammar or spelling errors (big surprise there) and just minor little things that no one but me ever seems to notice...Little nit picky things...The stuff everyone hates looking for and which I just revel in looking for...Anyway, I shall be off now...I just stayed up for a full (no naps, no nothing) 32 hours...Yeah...Right now I'm in a daze of somewhere in between worlds...It's a rather odd feeling...