Reviews for Take Me
Seeker of the Way chapter 1 . 3/5/2006
woah-sends you blessings if this is based on anything real-people can be so sick! #_#this was a really good poem!
RavenMae chapter 1 . 11/13/2005
On the contrary to your apparent antagonist above me, the poem didn't feel forced at all. It was pretty simple, basic and blunt, but then...I think that added to it. This type of issue is something that needs to be said directly, not woven around in circles waiting to come about.

Although it's not my cup of tea or topic choice, this poem made me both despise and mourn for the narrator. Interesting if nothing else.
Poe DeLasVegas chapter 1 . 11/13/2005
This is a really bad poem.

The subject serves more to make the reader detest the narrator for letting this happen to him/her rather than telling the cops in the first place.

Your rhyming is terribly forced, too. "I told you not to drop the soap?" It both seems forced and doesn't fit in with the rest of the poem.

The bad language served to make us think the narrator isn't that much of a kid.

Too bad. Try again.