Reviews for Seaside Serenade
With Rhyme and Reason chapter 1 . 7/21/2006
Really great flow and rhyming on this one. Really great. I like how it kind of sounds like a song-like something a maiden would sing as she dances down the beach, pressing her feet into the sand.

The only complaint I have is that you have a whole lot of lines starting with "and". I do this too-it's just so much easier to start lines like that when you're breaking up sentences. Small complaint.

Great poem. Impressive, even.

J
Dawn's-End chapter 1 . 11/20/2005
This poem accomplishes a very difficult goal which is to make a love poem that avoids becoming pretentious and self-indulgent. So many similar poems ruin themselves by resorting to cliches and such. great work