I really enjoy did so please write your chapters longers and chapters

I am so curius what going to happen next. What's Ikaika going to do? Will he listen to his father? (Doubt it) And what going to happen with the wolf?

Can't wait to read more. It's a great story.

Dun Dun Da

What's going to happen next? Great story. Very interesting. I so dieing to know what going too happen now.

I found your story on someone fav's and just had to read it.

After reading the last two sentences this is what I have to say:

Dun dun dun

Interesting. How did you come up with the names? And that was a long blurb. O_O

Hey! Manga! Nice concept of rewriting an old fairy tale.

One thing you might want to look at, though, is your dialogue. Here are some do's and don'ts I found online. These really taught me something when I read the do's and don'ts list at the top: archives/2004/10/23/12-exercises-for-improving-dialogue/

Hope you enjoy! About your character, Ikaika, maybe there should be a reason for him not to be scared of wolves to make the character more believable. A long-lasting encounter with a wolf when he was a toddler? A dream about wolves? Maybe he likes to use it to scare other kids but doesn't believe in them himself? At least, not until the encounter in the first chapter?

Just wanted to point that little thing out because Ikaika's intro paragraph made me ask why he liked wolves to begin with. People are stubborn. There would have to be something backing his initial interest in wolves, right?

Ooh, you got me hooked. :-] I quite like the concept, and I like the characters - Ikaika and Mahli. Ikaika's character is...appealing. And Mahli - he's cute. Well, keep up the good work.

Uh-oh...

Now you have to update really soon. X3

And poor Mahli! ;_; *huggles him*

"I didn't run out of the house naked, thank you. I quickly waltzed out the door in my undergarments"

Ahahahaha. lovely

whee! i want more! please? so far so good...

I don't like Ika's dad... but I do like Ika and Mahli.

Lovely chapter. For a "filler" I think it helped the story move along quite nicely. And I’m glad to see you update so soon!

Wonderful job. As far as grammar is concerned, I think you did a good self-editing sometime, kay? This is a good start to something I think I'll really enjoy.

Puppies! I like your fluid style of writing, and I hope you get more sporadic inspiration. Who doesn't love the rebellious character?