Reviews for Forever Strong
behindstonewalls chapter 1 . 8/20/2006
very powerful, it really leaves you with a sense of confusion and despair, but there are a few things that need some fixing, um, i think you could improve the line "to take the killing device and kill everyone", maybe change it to "to take a device of death and kill everyone"? "What possibly would make the person who did this do" would sound better as "What could possibly be the motive of the person who did this", "And god know what else" should be "And god knows what else" and do the people hunt for the murders? or the murderers? and the last two lines would be better "We will stand/ forever strong", great work though