Reviews for Kumi's Photo
Oki3xDoki3 chapter 5 . 12/18/2005
hahahahah introduction inded ahahahaha. cant wait until the next update, oh! i posted the second chapter to my December story, come check it out sometime!
Oki3xDoki3 chapter 4 . 12/18/2005
aw. ...teheh nakedness...anyway, i love this chapter! Kumi's so adorable! Ichigo is so nakednessylike...tehehhe anyway i cant stop picturing that, it was so funny ehehe anyway, ima bout to review the next one!
Oki3xDoki3 chapter 3 . 12/12/2005
Aw I want some KumixIchigo loving! I can't take it anymore! Thier so cute! kumi this chapter made me cry...more! ehehheeh ima keep reading!
Sleeteye chapter 3 . 12/10/2005
I really liked this story because:

It considers the issues of homosexuality

It's so interesting, the way that there are so many sides to Kumi, and how he has to live his life

The way that the text is written is done professionally in my opinion, and I can imagine buying a book written in the same way.

It has an interesting capturing issue, the photo itself, which makes you read on. Along with the actually homosexuallity, and whether or not Kumi will admit his love.

Good work Denji, keep the work coming!
writersrus05 chapter 1 . 12/8/2005
okay this is going to bug me so here it goes... YAOI is a boy/boy pairing and SHOUNEN-AI is girl/girl pairing...I TOLD you it would bug me!
Mars Demo chapter 3 . 12/3/2005
I really liked the concept of this story, and how you portrayed Kumi's character as having a split personality, to me it makes the story have a tone that seems more realistic. Other than that there was only one thing that really got to me, Kumi and Ichigo and the two hottest guys in school and Sakura is the most beautiful girl, it's almost like you want to have all of your characters perfectly beautiful. My advice would to remember that beauty is in the eye of the beholder, so discribe everything that you thought was beautiful about your character, that way the reader can know that the characters are in fact gorgeous by knowing that you took longer to discribe each 'beautiful' character, without being told to think that one person is beautiful and another is not.

And just so you know I'm not critizing you, XD I'm just in a typing mood XD


update soon
Oki3xDoki3 chapter 2 . 11/25/2005
gawd! that kazoua is mean! eheh anyway's i love your story just one problem, it's to short! I love it to death! I wanna read more! eheheh.-
kazoua chapter 2 . 11/25/2005
I like the general idea, but I have to ask a question. No offense intended, but do you beta or even look over your work before posting? I noticed so many mistakes that aren't just little typos. No harm done, but that kind of stuff distracted me from the real happenings in the story.
denji chapter 2 . 11/23/2005
we? this is a test XD;. im not sure how to veiw comments or aything ;
Mytheos chapter 2 . 11/23/2005
Do Continue.
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