|Reviews for The Chronicles of Kiki Crystal|
| Akedhi chapter 1 . 7/19/2006
... I am disconcerted, firstly. My nickname is Kiki.
That said, although your style is slightly clunky, I find myself curious what will happen next.
I do think you might want to proofread your stories a bit more carefully, there are a few spelling errors. I would try reading what you've written aloud, also, as that sometimes helps catch awkward phrasing or dodgy rhythm.
I look forward to reading the next chapter.