Reviews for Hooker's Lullaby
Captain Hooked chapter 1 . 7/16/2009
I really liked your poem its very powerful and true. I like how you say everything about how horrible the job is and then add in the part where she still has to say what she doesn't want to.
A Free Elf chapter 1 . 1/1/2008
I don't understand how this could offend anyone, but it is very powerful.

Yes, this was a great read - the imagery was fantastic.

"no child left behind

as the innocence dies"

That line almost made me cry...

I'm trying not to be negative, but I really would like to see this in prose. It doesn't really work as a poem in terms of its rhythm, but it has massive potential.
LPegasus chapter 1 . 2/12/2007
I agree with your friends... It is very good blunt.
woodstock1969 chapter 1 . 12/28/2005
That was a very powerful (and exellent) piece. This is the kind of work that desperately needs to be shared with the public: it reveals a part of society that isn't visible to most people, but yet is crying out for their help. Keep bringing out the truth with your words!
goinggone chapter 1 . 11/27/2005
wow. shocking. wrenching...
Smoky Bear chapter 1 . 11/27/2005
that's heartbreaking, and beautifully written, i'm glad you took your friends advice. a longer piece might not have had the same impact... you'd have run the risk of getting sentimental, and it works better as a harsh reality check.