|Reviews for Office Work|
| SilentStrength chapter 1 . 12/8/2005
Wow. I want to work where you work! Don't you just love free verse?
| angie3838 chapter 1 . 12/7/2005
This seems/is very redundant. That said, I do really like the last two lines. I just think you should go into the specifics, because specifics make a poem.
I can think of a few things: you said you were stapling. The top of the stapler could be like... the top of a slide? and where you hit the ground, the staple hits the paper.
What are your "ideas"? Who are these "people" and why are they "laugh"ing and "play"ing? It's all too vague, and really takes away from the initial idea that struck you.
It's general society's thinking that the office is different from a playground, so how is it the same to you? I would really like to see what you end up doing with this.
| rose chapter 1 . 11/29/2005