Reviews for Rays of Perfection
miss-blackhair chapter 1 . 12/11/2005
OMG.

im so mesmerised by your poem. its incredibly awesome. i love how you use the english language so delicately and make the meaning run deep. you really have talent for writing poem! you must be taking literature in school, huh? ) im not that bad in lit but i suck in writing poems. lol

okay, my fav phrases here are:'Let me love you.

Now, you just a shadow of your former self.

My human arms can’t reach around you,

Smothering, water douses the flames.

Suffocating on the sultry smoke,

Gone with the ashes of my life.'

and thats what i call breath taking. hope to hear frm you soon! good luck in all your other works.
Aslam chapter 1 . 12/6/2005
i love metaphysical stuff so this was right in my ballpark! i think that the way you paced this out was great, you kept it sweet n mostly simple

bravo-aslam