|Reviews for Of Shadows and Fire|
| Ck90 chapter 1 . 7/29/2006
Hello Ely! If you are stuck just email me!
| blondie-baby99 chapter 4 . 1/24/2006
| Saisjura chapter 4 . 12/30/2005
hey... me again...
good chapter... don't really feel like writing right now... since I feel off my snowboard God knows how many times, the mountain we went snowboarding on was too icy and therefore the snowboard din't have a good grip ... so now every mucle in my body is screaming with pain...
well happy new year to you all... hope for the best!
| Ck90 chapter 4 . 12/29/2005
Well Hello dear authorI am reviewing our storyYeas i am still on vacationBecause well I just amI have not even startd my science Fairoh what the hell
| Saisjura chapter 3 . 12/16/2005
ah i loved this chapter.. and it flowed so gracafully(that is so corny).. don't worry Clari's not the only one who's in final Exams lalaLand
lol... just wanted to congradulate you on a grat chapter.. and the main Character reminds me of you.. to some extent... hmm... coffe addict...always reading books to help you figure out something...lol
| blondie-baby99 chapter 3 . 12/15/2005
wow good story but itz kinda confusing win fox, tiger, swan, and dragon r all talking u kinda lost me there (not that i have ne room 2 talk) wellz itz really good keep dating btw ill love forever if u read and review my story *grinz* wellz keepz upz the good werk ur new semi-physcotic fan brittany
| Soren Nyrond chapter 2 . 12/15/2005
Very interesting start - if I can find my way back in a week or two ...
| Saisjura chapter 2 . 12/13/2005
I'm sowy (put on puppy dog eyes)
And you’re oblivious... I never said the story was bad... I actually like it... or else I wouldn’t have it in my fav.s list!... And you know your stories always rock... *sighs*...
Oh and btw.. That time in MSN, I dint answer it was because I was having an argument w/ my mom.. And was therefore not in the room, again I sowy. I really am!... and you know I don't lie... especially to my friends.
And About the review I left... the questions I left where more like, well, I dunno, some things I had personal controversy with in my head... ok I'm just rambling...
It's just that between Clarisa and you... your getting me al confused.. Clarisa talks about chapters that are coming up... and then I always thought that the camp was in Japan or something (give me a break here, I’m thinking Elektra and shit like that.. where all the action happens in countries far away...)... and at the same time I'm keeping track of about 20 stories (not kidding) and reading a new one every day.. And don't even get my started on those assholic finals I still have to take...ah
I'm sorry... I really am...
And of coarse I don't expect you to develop the whole idea of the story in just 2 chapters...
For now all I can say is sorry... and I have to go, seeing as in! Minute my moms gonna come barging in here to check that I'm studying for finals... and I really don't have the spirit to be yelled at (more than I already have been).
| saisjura chapter 2 . 12/13/2005
Guess who's back to review
I liked it... though as you said..your taking it too fast. I know I'm gonna sound like our SAT prep-writing teachers but: "you need to put a tad bit more detail into stuff"if your wondering what kind of stuff? well, lets see: her childhood before she came to be kidnaped.. now that i mention it...How the hell DID SHE GET kidnaped?... some other stuff: the camp in general; btw in japan and those places, the camps are usually surrounded by Bambu not pine trees (just in case you where confused as to what to put as scenery in you story).. how is the camp protected? where did tigger get his nickname? what time are yu developing the story in? is tigger's dad a proffesor in the camp?(btw he should be, it would be hilarious).. and alot more questions... ijust don't feel like writing them right now.
and then you should put more,like ackward(sp is so wrong!)situations between the 2 lover teenagers...wait...Are they teenagers? see!thats what you should make clear to the audience(readers).
Btw. why in hell are they mingeling(i know sp is wrong..just too tired to care)with the enemy? thats something you should focus on developing...
well i'll leave ya' to the story.
hope you post soon!
Have a Happy Christmas
| saisjura chapter 1 . 12/11/2005
ah...how could you use my name like thatI am gonna kill you! so be carefull monday when you are taking the Bio Test. I might storm into the classroom... and you get the than the mis-use of my name, the story is course I always know whats gonna happen next since a certain someone keeps on telling me about it...lol... right CKLR... don't worry 'Char'... its dosn't bother me... its a good relif from the continious blabbering of the teachers...lolEven though I alredy know whats gonna happen in the next chaptr i still have to say(according to protocol) "Hope you post soon"and with that said I'm out!
| Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 12/8/2005
You create a fiery main character in this; her little jokes and side comedy really made this come alive for me. Great start, keep up the good work.