Reviews for Sitting Bear
Muted Dragon chapter 1 . 12/20/2005
yay the first :D. hehe. let's see: you start out with a cliche." mother's face"; repetition of 'filthy pigs'; "everyone. They"; try starting a new paragraph for dialogue, or else it looks drag on, and confusing sometimes; "wedding's"; "Everyone was lying in a pool of their own blood."; what with the prantheses? :P. lyk. -m.d.-