Whoa...very cool. Nifty rhyming...

That rhyme scheme boggles the mind!

I think that went too fast for me to really catch it. So I read it again, and it still zoomed by before I could get a close look. It's eerie. It sort of trips around itself, like a small but swift and noisy stream, small enough to hide beneath the brush so you wouldn't know it was there except for that distinct trickling sound.

Been reading too long. Must sleep.

Wow, I'm awed over here with the brilliant rhyming job you did. The poem is very good.