Reviews for Fast Food Restaurant
Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 12/19/2005
Ending was interesting.I liked the desparity between the giant orange soda, and the small diet coke. Very representative of the poem itself. This does have a nice flow to it, yet i think it could be enhanced by lengthening it, giving background from the speakers point of view as to why the other person makes the speaker both happy in the moment and frazzled, for lack of a better word, in the past. Just a thought, but overall it has a good narrative and the setting kind of creates the mood.
sloppy firsts chapter 1 . 12/16/2005
this is beautiful. just like a story :) and your rhyming is incredibly flawless. but the ending didn't really seem final to me. i was kind of expecting to have him give her a coat or something (but that might just be my over cheesiness.)