|Reviews for fluorescent fire|
| xlilxleex chapter 1 . 7/17/2007
really touched me
it's like your writing of a person i know
constructive criticism: spacing can be powerful
you can use it to help with the flow of the poem
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 2/25/2006
Favorite line: "Your hair lit up like fluorescent fire." Just b/c it reminds me of the first line of "Amber Waves" by Tori Amos. I don't know why it does, but it does. This is pretty. And passionate. Nice work. Keep writing! :)
| Kartoffel on Canvas chapter 1 . 2/1/2006
really capture the emotion in the words, very passionate. good approach!
| Theatre des Vampires chapter 1 . 1/24/2006
Wicked good! Great descriptive does burn...
Gald to add my name to this list.
-Theatre des Vampires
| Jezsh chapter 1 . 12/29/2005
just plain beautiful.
| none of burt's beeswax chapter 1 . 12/27/2005
wow. this captured my heart. the words & images are beautiful and they burn (i suppose this was intended). i love this: "I wonder if you can hear hearts drop as/You walk by, as they fall towards/the ground." absolutely amazing.
| my failure chapter 1 . 12/26/2005
wow! i love the imagry in write!:)
| The Fourth Fate chapter 1 . 12/23/2005
Woah. Very amazing. I have NO critism and I'm really not just saying that. I loved it.
| poet tree chapter 1 . 12/21/2005
i would give constructive critisism, but there's nothing to critique. just...wonderful. i love it.
| Infection chapter 1 . 12/20/2005
WoW. full of vivid writing !
| amanda.h chapter 1 . 12/20/2005
I really don't have any contructive critism. This is an amazing, well done poem. Everything flows perfectly.
And thank you for the review on my poem.
| classic violet chapter 1 . 12/20/2005
The ending was superb. This seems like such a powerful and yet delicate peice.
| Changethesubject chapter 1 . 12/17/2005
nice poem! it sounded very..um i cant explain it. its true and sounds real...does that make sense. this really good - one of the best poems i've read. lovely style.
| a lonely september chapter 1 . 12/17/2005
pure poetry right here. i love this. best thing i've read lately.
| Bronzeage chapter 1 . 12/17/2005
Very good, vivid images and good phrasing and rhythmn