Reviews for Could Have Been There
bleeding subterfuge chapter 1 . 1/24/2006
i think that you should try writing about this same topic, without the forced rhyming. i am a big fan of rhyme and still not very good with prose, but i think that you should try focusing more on the emotion and less on the rhyme, it might make this piece more powerful.
brokendreams21 chapter 1 . 1/20/2006
I just realized I never reviewed for this poem. Oopsies. I mighta commented on your space though...Oh well. Very well written and it rhymes! (Currently still obsessed) And it tells a real story although not from a real perspective. (At least I hope not) Anyways, I hope you keep up the good work! (And I posted another piece named Remembering...or something like that!) Great job!
FictionPressPenName chapter 1 . 12/20/2005
The concept is amazing, but I think the rhyming may have been a bit stressed. Still, a great poem, and it does make you think.
freakstar chapter 1 . 12/19/2005
er, i'm no shrink, but things will get better. just think about how your friend would want you to go on (i really hope this doesn't sound as cheesy as i think it sounds...)
Uriah Hamilton chapter 1 . 12/19/2005
Life can really be sad but hang in there.