|Reviews for peter pan|
| demonlovesong chapter 4 . 5/3/2008
that was amazingly beautiful.
in such a tragic way.
but i love it all the same.
| darkstarsgrace chapter 1 . 2/28/2006
such a great poem, it sounds like it could be a classic rock song. nicely done.
| emmathree chapter 1 . 2/28/2006
This is... to say the least, disturbing. Which any of my friends will gladly tell you is a sign of pure genius.
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 4 . 2/18/2006
I like the specifics of which star it was. That is cool. But once again, the suicide thing...Keep writing! :)
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 3 . 2/18/2006
Ooh, not a big fan of the second stanza of this one. It was going well, then you brought up suicide. Yikes. That's always a risky move. But. Keep writing! :)
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 2 . 2/18/2006
You bring in such random ideas, like the ice caps, but it works! That rules! I love your writing! Keep writing! :)
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 2/18/2006
WHOA! That was awesome! I loved it, so sexual and just yummy. Fantastic! Keep writing! :)
| bread and circuses chapter 4 . 2/16/2006
Holy mackerel, ahh, wow, good golly, gee-whiz, take your pick 'cause they're all running through my mind. Some are R-rated versions, but still.
This? AMAZING. The peter pan chapter itself was brilliance defined but the continuation is godlike. I worship your mind for this.
| you're so postmodern chapter 1 . 2/7/2006
So deep, I love ur metaphors or the way u compare him! Very cooL! I will check out some more of ur work laterz but now g2g, Nona
| simpleplan13 chapter 4 . 1/20/2006
wow... sad and beautiful play on the peter pan thing... i hafta say in the last chapter i thought it was wendy who committed suicide, but im easily confused
| simpleplan13 chapter 3 . 1/20/2006
wow.. such a happy beginning and a sad ending.. im not sure i like it... i feel like they should be separate chapters.. i kinda want more of the happiness & more about the child, but that's just me
| simpleplan13 chapter 2 . 1/20/2006
i love that last line... it kinda summed up all the fears you said she had... nice descrptions... kinda funny somewhat sad... nice job
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 1/20/2006
i like this... very cool.. the descriptions are great... i love that second line and the glow in the dark part.. awesome
| Faerie Energy chapter 4 . 1/9/2006
I love it! Great work. Very well written.
All due respect,Faerie Energy
| Sarah-Brighteyes chapter 4 . 1/1/2006
So very sad...I wish I couldnt cry sometimes.
I loved this part though. You follow the imagination of peter pan through it. I think you should write a short story about this. Just a suggestion. Take the poem and create something longer... though it wouldnt make the piece any better, just a compliment is all.
Very good writing. I am glad you have some new things up. Makes me excited to come back to fictionpress. Bravo Dear citrus as always.