Reviews for Beyond Friendship |
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![]() ![]() Just like me but I still have blonde hair. lol. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Update soon! |
![]() ![]() Have you ever been on Quizilla? Read the stories there, wrote a story there, anything like that? 'Cause honestly, this story reminds me a lot like the stuff on there. No offense, but your story needs some work. It seems kind of unrealistic in two counts: One, the names. Sure, I can get the main character is named 'Rye' because you want her to be badass, but honestly, when you name all your characters like that, it just turns humorous: Aim, Shooter, Danae, Troy, Ice, then Drake, Katrine, Vee, Alex and Alec. Honestly, not everyone who is goth needs a nickname. It would have been better if some of their names were classic and easier to remember, like Amy (instead of Aim), or Dana (Danae), Katy (Katrine), but those were just examples. Second, I stopped reading after chapter two (the second day of school, which they skipped) she's giving Shooter a ride to school, teasing Aim to tell her crush to Drake. Honestly, if it were me on the second day of school, I'd barely remember their names let alone bribe them into confessing to their crush or actually giving them a ride to school. Other than that, the characters seem really well thought out, and the idea is really good: a private shool outcast with famous parents going to public school for the first time. I like Shooter. He seems funny. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw. you need to update more. Ice Rye Aw |
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![]() ![]() if vee was a real person i would have slapped her! if ice ex-girlfriend[i cant rember her name right now] was real i would have slapped her to, and i would have slapped rye in the beinging for being so bump about her felling for ice. come to think of it i would slapped alot of people in your story. is rye an only child? is ice an only clild? do you have any acconts on any other sites? will i ever stop talking? keep writeing im loveing this story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() well this is definately interesting |
![]() ![]() ![]() NO haha must update! xx |
![]() ![]() ![]() God, Drake get it right! Guys are so dumb! Love the Ice and Rye thing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love this! this is so... freaken AWESOME! i hope aim and blake get together.. they would be so cute ]] |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is fucking amazing, i love it. ireally do. ugh i already hate zed or 'catarina' *vomits all over preppy girls skirts**then points and laughs* |
![]() ![]() ![]() whee another story about goth/punk people! even though i'm probably an extremely perky, "preppy" person, i am strangely attracted to these fics. i like it so far, but i am commenting now in the middle of the story to mention that one incongruency - it's weird how they'e in austria, but it's basically like they haven't left the country. the boy spoke ENGLISH (maybe he was just on vacay too), the arcade's evidently all in english, and why is zed in austria, too? lol back to reading.. |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow, this story is amazing, i absolutely adore it! it's so sweet and light hearted, a perfect read for a horrible day. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very interesting! cna't wait for more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ah.. ah! Seems like Shooter likes Ry... :P UPDATE SOON! |