|Reviews for Beating the Game|
| Zannafire chapter 18 . 2/9
Love this story I wish you would continue with it.
| anon chapter 1 . 3/22/2016
Having read your chapters, I have to congratulate you on your writing style! I thought I wouldn't be able to stand the MC after the first chapter, especially given how he treated people and his studies, but the interaction between Patrick and the girls was interesting enough to keep me going. The dialogue is awesome, some of the plot just a tad unrealistic. But, as someone with more of a Tom-like personality, it's possible that I just simply don't get the appeal of his conquests. ;)
| SkipperCal3 chapter 18 . 11/18/2015
Oh no you DIDN'T !
| OscarJLaw chapter 18 . 4/23/2015
Marielle seems to me like someone Megan Fox type of level hot.I so can't really blame Patrick for falling for her games.
I wish you would continue this sexual chemistry between Pat and Marielle is really great.
and Pat is absolute douche but in nicer Derek
| Caitlyn chapter 18 . 8/23/2013
Really love this!
Are u continuing it?
U prob won't coz it's been a couple of years tho :( •sigh•
| imperfectlyokay chapter 18 . 7/28/2013
I think the first thing that drew me to this story was the male MC. Cheers! I love a new point of view. I was a bit disappointed at the end of the chapter since I assumed it was going to be one of those "smart-alec high school students have a power play" kind of stories, but as the story progressed I was pleasantly surprised - more than pleasantly surprised, because although the power play between Pat and Mari is very much in existence, unlike most stories, neither of them had any kind of shattering, soul-revealing moment where they confessed to their past sins and cried a lot. Pat's extreme insecurity and paranoia also really kept my interest going, because every character needs a flaw, and as flaws go, Pat obviously has a chip on his shoulder the size of South America.
Mari was fun to read as well, although something about her bored me a little. I can't pinpoint exactly what, but I know that if I met someone like her in real life, I'd probably lose interest very fast (I'm a very lazy person. Playing Mari's kind of games would require way too much effort.)
Hikari - love her; she's the type of feisty, cracking journalist that I hope to be someday. Interesting dynamic developing between her and Pat, so I was really looking forward to seeing where that was going...
...oh, but you haven't updated since 2008. Nice. I realise that you probably actually have real work to do, though, so you're forgiven. I just wanted to review and tell you that should you ever feel the need to dig this story up and continue it (not likely) then I shall be right here waiting for an update.
But first! A criticism. Mari, Pat and Hikari are way, way, WAY too smart. I don't know if this is a USA high school thing but in my country high schoolers definitely don't have that much brain capacity. Speaking as a seventeen-year-old girl, I can tell you that I am definitely not that smart, nor have I ever met someone my own age as smart as any one of these characters. It's your story, and you have creative licence, nut that was basically the one thing that I found unrealistic - even if it was enjoyable to read.
WOW okay, I think that's definitely a long enough review, especially since I don't know if you even read reviews anymore (doubt it.) On the off-chance that you do, though, it was a pleasure reading your story! Also - I knew you were a guy right from the start. The writing style. Also, 'Lord Iron Balls' was a slight giveaway. Cheers! Hope wherever you are, you're super successful and still writing.
PS - 'industrial strength death coffee' LOVE IT.
| Melly chapter 3 . 6/29/2013
Dear Lord how did it take me this long to find this story. I must say you are an AMAZING writer and you have a damn good sense of humor that is transmitted to these characters of yours. I love Patrick, I love him I do. Can't wait to see what the rest of this story entails
| Mechanical Dolls chapter 4 . 4/10/2013
Why... do I imagine Rachel McAdams whenever I picture Marielle in my head?
(And yes, I couldn't be buggered to log in, and yes, I know you have not updated this for 4 years. But I just recently gone back reading this because I remember how fantastic this is)
| Mia52 chapter 8 . 3/23/2013
For some reason, I have a feeling that Marielle is going to back stab the hell out of Patrick more so than what Alexis did. Even though this is a game and whatever, I think Patrick is going to be hurt ten times over. Hopefully, I'll be proven wrong in this.
However, I did like the little talk between the siblings, even though Patrick did blow Katia's warning off, you can tell they have a lot of respect and love for each other.
| Mia52 chapter 7 . 3/23/2013
Great chapter. Yes, that bitch Alexis needed to have a broken nose. I find it as great satisfaction that her nose is still crooked. :)
| Mia52 chapter 6 . 3/22/2013
Ooh, seems like shit is about to hit the fan now. What is going to happen next, I wonder?
| Mia52 chapter 5 . 3/22/2013
Hikari sounds like a great girl. I would so much like to see Patrick's and Hikari's friendship blossom more. It doesn't have to be a relationship, per se, just a really great friendship.
| Mia52 chapter 4 . 3/21/2013
This chapter was great. I'm already loving his friend, Tom. Like, he's just like Patrick, but still is his own person.
For some reason, the scene with Patrick making her friend move made me giggle so hard. I don't know, I guess just for the fact that he didn't even have to do anything and she left with her tail between her legs.
| Mia52 chapter 3 . 3/20/2013
This chapter was great. I love the little scene between Patrick, Marielle and Brett. The little statement Marielle threw in at Brett's departing figure was nicely put and was sure to make his ego dip quite a bit.
The kiss between Patrick and Marielle... /fans self/ That was just hot. It was just wonderful to read about a kiss with no flowery language used to describe it.
I should've known there would be some sort of mysterious past thrown in. It just wouldn't be complete without one. I can't wait to get to that part of the story. :)
| Mia52 chapter 2 . 3/20/2013
Haha! That was some spectacular revenge on Brett! Horse porn, gay porn and anything else considered wrong in the eyes of churchgoers on his laptop - that was just the perfect revenge. I can't wait to see how this is going to play out with Marielle and Patrick pretending to be dating.