Cute! Lol, but really, so sweet! Perfect summer weekend break or whatever...happy poem! Love, Mia

I feel so content after reading this piece I cant explain. The imagery is so untainted It's like i'm watching this for real. Truly stunning writing.

aww... the imagery was lovely the last stanza was so sweet and real great job!

keep writing!

this was so...real. it wasn't glossed over by anything and that was what made it so breathtaking.

oh god, the light, lifelike feeling to all of this made me swoon.'angled light slants through wooden slatswatch the swallows and speak softly''after a whilewhen essence of air really hits our lungsI'll recognize certainty in your facethe slip of your eyes to my smile''a rush of wings from above''be tickled and breathless, laughing and in love' god, this was all so job.

This has such innocence and reminds me of a cherished memories. I can just see everything in this from sun-dappled skin to that big ole barn. This is sweetly beautiful.

very idyllic and pretty. (a relief from the ofte overload of angst i'd otherwise find). i especially like the phrase "more than a few winters old." and it ends perfectly.

pretty. i find myself falling into the dream.

i love this line: "more than a few winters old". it seems to describe more than just an old barn.