Reviews for The 1147 Victoria outbound
poppy nowis chapter 1 . 4/17/2006
really good, i love the ending lines, and the layout/format whatever you call it is very clever
Jezsh chapter 1 . 1/11/2006
who hasn't loved the stranger on the train before? You just caught that feeling. I like the stop-start quality of this - not so sure about the single letter lines but at the same time I can't imagine it differently. Great piece.
a lonely september chapter 1 . 1/9/2006
'Or(worse)The weatherAnd grin as if to sayWhat-can-you-do?' wow. have thought it so many times. 'dont think that i didnt love you for 37 minutes' beautiful. this poem was gorgeous. lovely job.
lady-in-the-mirror chapter 1 . 1/9/2006
SHINY POME IZThe broken line thing works. Bunching things up and drawing them out... Not makings sense, as ever. C x
moralofthestory chapter 1 . 1/9/2006
That's very symbolic. The jerky rhythm of the poetry echoes the rough ride on the train, and the spacing makes a unique effect on the way that the poem is read aloud, which I actually tried after I read it silently. This is marvellous. Truly.
Iris Early chapter 1 . 1/9/2006
I LOVE THIS. The broken lines DO work. x