Reviews for The Piper and the Doll
Lovediamond15 chapter 7 . 6/23/2006
wow, great chapter! i think i have an idea as to who that man is...but i wont say lol! aww, Ariel is soo sweat!like a little child! a smexy child! nd Jared is an interesting character, little competition going there! lol. - love it!
atreyu love chapter 7 . 6/22/2006
is it jared? O_o.. cant wait.. update please
NixiePixie chapter 1 . 6/22/2006
I love this story - it's so adorable how you portray Ariel as a child trapped within an adult. I can remember all the times I'd asked questions which made my mum shift uneasily and my dad turn red. just...kep, keep writing!
elena-maria chapter 7 . 6/21/2006
eiyo! all's gud as usual... theres this one thing i noticed though... ive never heard of anyone masturbating over a kama sutra book... hm... i think that a kama sutra book is more informative rather than sexually provocative... yep... one more thing... 'i wonder what's going on with that mind of yours' ;P
OohMyAngiie chapter 7 . 6/20/2006
GREAT STORY! took me a while to finally take a chance to read this, but im IN LUV WIT THIS STORY! i never imagined this kind of plot, but its absolutely GREAT and SO FUCKN ADDICTING! aw ariel is so CA-UTE!
Jayn chapter 7 . 6/20/2006
I got caught up in the story again just in time for it to end. Please update!
amelia chapter 7 . 6/20/2006
lol, the doll was introduced to porno,lol. aww, ariel's a little jealous, so chappie is awesome. so the evil doll has returned *hmm, stokes invisible beard, lol.*
cherrie chapter 7 . 6/20/2006
wow I really liked this story... The plot is really good. where did you get the idea? if the mistral is a woman I think the mistake was falling in love or something:D whatever keep up with the story hun love ya mujcx buhbye pleasee update soon!
Green Eyes chapter 7 . 6/20/2006
Wow! Again!this is so imaginative- i'm not ususally into the whole fantasy/magic thing but it works really well here- i'm is coincidence that your pen name spells out Mary Leah Hatleen backwards? I dunno why i noticed that,i just did- if it is coincidence that is so cool!
PrincessEmmeh chapter 7 . 6/20/2006
Aww! Poor Ariel!So cute though. _

I'll be waiting for the next chapter :]
poisonbunny chapter 4 . 6/20/2006
Wizard 16 must have been a trickster. Oh my god *cracks up* This story just keeps getting funnier and funnier. I love it so! *huggles story*

I like the confusion Piper is suffering from. Give him ordinary clothes or revealing ones? XD Piper isn't as "innocent" as people think she is, is she? _~

I don't think her mom's reaction to Piper being "licked" was very realistic. I don't know - guy licking my face at the table? I can picture something along the lines of "No salivary interactions at the table!" or "get a room, you two."

Okay, I surrender. You have won me over with the awesomeness of this story. It is SO going on my faves right now. This instant. *click*

Awesome job, yo.
poisonbunny chapter 3 . 6/20/2006
Uh oh! The trouble begins . . .

Poor Ariel. He got molested. -_-' Doll rape. Funny, I didn't think he'd be psychic so that was a surprise. I certainly wouldn't a doll reading my thoughts . . . heh. *shifty eyes*

I also think it's nice that Piper has a gay friend. I do too, and felt very honored when he decided to tell me (even though he was afraid I wouldn't be okay with it). So, right on! _

What's with the evil radioactive dog?

Okay . . . so now I wanna find out. This story seems familiar and I think I might have read one of your other stories before, too . . . Shadow Deep, maybe.
poisonbunny chapter 2 . 6/20/2006
"What do you mean there's warlocks out there that hate my guts?" Priceless. Absolutely priceless. That sounds like something I would probably say.

I like the fact that the doll isn't just a doll but actually has some intelligence amidst the fluff and innocence. I particularly liked the part where he tricked Piper into claiming him. "But Piper, I want to be yours"

Poor girl. I laughed so hard at that part. _

I swear that doll is the king of double-entendres. He's going to drive her over the edge, I know it. _
poisonbunny chapter 1 . 6/20/2006
*sigh* lucky girl _

So I really like her doll phobia and how she accidentally "groped" it. That was classic. There was just one glaring error that I could see:

"and a left green eye and a left blue eye"

Um . . . yeah, and I think that was it, so great story! I'll go read the other chapters now . . . _ *click*
anon chapter 7 . 6/20/2006
update soon! Is Jared evil?
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