Reviews for The Sinner's Bride
Mattamgirl chapter 15 . 11/30/2010
I just finished reading your story and I am in love. I loved the ending and I liked how you didn't change eris's personality. She stayed the same cute innocent girl and didn't become a badass like so many stories do. I really really liked it.
Rdhddstpchld93 chapter 15 . 11/14/2010
LOVED IT! Definetly going to remember your story for a LONG time! I feel rather selfish asking for a sequal, but I want one REALY BADLY! Good job on an awesome, amazing, wonderful, well-written story! :)
Wolfchick chapter 1 . 9/9/2010
Lol 13th of October is my birthday. This is a great story!
LocalYokel chapter 4 . 7/21/2010
ok so i'm definitely hooked on this story! you've got a much more unique twist to your average high school romance and i can't wait to see what happens next!

i only have a couple of teensy issues:

- demion sounds like a total hottie etc. but there's something almost feminine in the way he talks... it just seems like too much of a contradiction with him being a badass/devil's son and really... perky(?) at the same time... it puts me off him a little bit :S

- i get why you'd want him to be more dark and a bad boy type but it's almost as if he's deperately trying to convince the reader of that by declaring his drug-use, sexual exploits, hardcore partying and nicotine habit so carelessly, almost as if he's flaunting it...

he's the devil's son so obviously, taking part in all that's sinful is going to be a regular thing and i get that... but

it's all a bit forced. maybe tone it down with the "i can't have sex so i'll go fetch my heroin toolkit" and "let's get a blowjob off a random girl because i'm sexually frustrated".

his whole locker room escapade with cassie also confused me because... if he's so madly in love with eris, how is it so easy for him to go and do that without even a second thought? even if he IS a demon. i just think toning down that whole "look! i'm a total badass!" thing would help this chapter seem a lot more feasible.

i really hope this doesn't offend you or anything! i think you write incredibly well and your other characters are VERY believable and relatable. so far from what i've read, i can see you're very talented! i just thought a bit of constructive criticism might help you make this story go from being great to fantastic! :D
not one for sanity chapter 15 . 6/23/2010
I cried; wich in my opinion makes a story unforgettable and truly beautifull. wow, that was amazing...
purplebob chapter 15 . 6/13/2010
gosh, this story is really great. its been a while since i read such a good story on fp.
Dead Deactivated chapter 15 . 12/19/2009
This broke my heart... so completely sad...
XxAbandonedAngelxX chapter 16 . 12/12/2009
I really liked it :)
Vaelynne chapter 16 . 11/28/2009
so now i'm finished and i cant understand how the ending can make me so depressed and happy at the same time. anyway, i liked the whole story. It was different- a good kind of different.
Vaelynne chapter 11 . 11/28/2009
So i just got to chapter 11, and i flipped because that little angel's name is delaney. I always trip when i see my name used. this is the first time i've seen it on a male though...

anyway. sorry this wasn't an actually review but i'm diggin the story so far.
jenni-tay chapter 15 . 7/21/2009
this is a really good story, but it was really kinda sad when all her friends died
I'm-The-Weird-Girl chapter 15 . 7/6/2009

that was WICKED!

loved it all

sad about how she had to watch all her friends grow and die

but it was still really really good!

congrats on writing such a cool story!
I'm-The-Weird-Girl chapter 11 . 7/6/2009

*blinks at screen*

whoa... was NOT expecting that at ALL!

so gabriel is her father which make Delany her brother

and now she can't go up to heaven and will be really sick when she goes to earth

is all that right?

if so then wtf? what is with Demion? I mean seriously he's such an idiot! lols

cab't wait to see what happens next

i honestly have NO idea!


awesome story btw...
I'm-The-Weird-Girl chapter 4 . 7/6/2009
cool story

i like it so far

can't believe how...badass demion actually is! lols

can't wait to see what happens next!
Wtf-Are-Scrambled-Eggs chapter 16 . 6/13/2009
Very well written!


I nearly cried at the end though :(

oxo a
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