Reviews for The Sinner's Bride
October 29 chapter 15 . 3/3/2007
wow. umm . . . its a good story, but it makes me feel so sinful, like seriously, wow! umm . . . some errors, it was okay in the structure and stuff. but wow. umm . . .

October 29 chapter 9 . 3/2/2007
I like both equally.

umm . . .wtf?
October 29 chapter 8 . 3/2/2007
lol. i like ur A/N. teehee. its good. not the best, cuz it still creeps me out a bit, but anything to do with the devil does, so that's just me i guess. its well written for the most part, with the exception of the few and far between typos and grammatical errors. its pretty good, i'd have to say, for the most part.

October 29 chapter 5 . 3/2/2007
wow. im listening to THE KILL by 30 Seconds To Mars, while reading (music and books are an entity in my world) and wow it kinda fits. i love that when it happens! good job. ur really good at the two perspectives.


p.s. i offer my deepest and most sincere condolences about your brother. may he rest in peace and love forever.
October 29 chapter 4 . 3/2/2007
im liking Demion a LOT better now. he's not as creepy, u understand him now.
October 29 chapter 3 . 3/2/2007
umm . . . this is really creepy, but now that there is a flaming homo involved, i can't resist, they are soo funny.
October 29 chapter 1 . 3/2/2007
how does she know she's the bride of Demion?
Angel of Ink chapter 15 . 3/1/2007
I absolutely LOVE this story. I don't think the devil would be like that, that kind, but I love it all the same. Demion is an awesome name. D And the end is perfect.
akaCHEEKS chapter 2 . 2/23/2007
just reviewing cause i forgot to add it to my fav stories list the first time.
akaCHEEKS chapter 15 . 2/23/2007
wow. just goes to say that love is pure no matter what. jeez. no wonder this story's title is 'the sinner's bride' cause she sinned. they never had a wedding? how sad dude.
Bada-Bing.Bada-Bang chapter 1 . 2/4/2007
I hope this review doesn't upset you. I mean no harm by it. I would just like to point out a few things that..bothered me. First, I did not like the description of the main character's eyes. I don't think it's even humanly possible to have a brown eye and a green eye, but I might be wrong. It was just so left field. Rarely in real life, do you see someone with two completely different eye colors. I've seen a blue and green, but they're similar and hold the same color tones. The background information on Eris was very vague and slightly...I don't now..lame? It didn't cause any mystery or layer in the story. Droning on through the whole school day was pretty pointless. It established characters, too many in fact, but that was basically it. Unless there was some profound event at the school, I see no reason behind it. The cliche preppy girls was slightly annoying, as well. From experience, I know that the 'preps' aren't even generally like that. They can be bitches, yeah, but they do it with class. There's generally about two thousand kids in a normal high school and it just so happens that they singled out the main character? And what was with her not being able to have her licence as a senior? I could understand if she was intelligent and skipped a few grades, but that would still make her younger. I presume since she doesn't have her license, that she's fifteen. Odd. I mean, there's tons of 17-18 year old seniors that don't get their licenses. What was the point in making a fifteen year old a senior? That wasn't well executed. Having her walk home was sorta odd too. I can understand that was the place of the devil's son coming into play, but it was too convenient. If Alex's parents let her call them "mom" and "dad", wouldn't they drive her home? If they cared enough to let her think of them as parents, why let her walk home at night, in the dark, alone? Way too convenient.

I don't mean this to be a butchering of you writing skills. I'm no writer myself, but I fancy myself an avid reader that would like to help writers create unique or even reasonable work. Although I was disappointed in the first chapter, thanks to your interesting summary, I will continue to read the story. (My mom embedded in me to always finish what I started.)
Natajaaay chapter 15 . 2/2/2007
i love this story, i only just finished reading it. I recognised it at the start and just had to carry on reading it again. It made me cry at the end. You describe everything so well, and I really love that about this story. I hope you do something else like this (I'd have to read it!)...

best wishes (I just sound soppy now!), nat x
Asia Ralaia Schiegoh chapter 15 . 1/31/2007
So, I've read your story some time ago, and I just finished reading the Epilogue. I wasn't too bad of an ending, sure, but I felt like it was missing something. Maybe it's just me, but I really favor the whole "Married with a baby on the way (if there isn't one already)", cuz I was dying throughout the entire plot to see what kind of relationship Eris and Demion would have with their little demons running around all over the place. But that's just me. It was most def a great read, though; no doubt! I would even adore a sequel... possibly?

Miss Dusk chapter 15 . 1/27/2007
I read your story in one sitting. It was that addicting, like Deimon's kisses. ;) I really enjoyed this story. 'Course there were some parts that I thought were a little fast-paced but that's okay.

Honestly, if you could expand on this and make it longer or something, you would have a full-fledged AWESOME novel. :D Well, toodles!
creator09 addy chapter 1 . 1/23/2007
okay, i in no way mean this to be mean, but there was almost no exposition. How would she know what she is now just cause she got some weird necklace. I dont know i might be being really harsh, but it just seems abrupt
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