Reviews for Finding Serendip |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting work. I would have liked to see more of their budding relationship from the moment they race to the gardens, but the piece doesn't necessarily need it. Thanks for posting! |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This is addicting. Quite fascinating as well. And really, I wish there was more of it. All of a sudden, I looked at the scroll bar and noticed that the page was over. It feels so... weird. I love it and it's just a one-shot. That's what makes me scared of complete and one-shot stories. No more of it. T.T But this was really nice. I love Vasilis. But when it was mentioned that he married Lori, it quite crushed my heart badly. I understand Malin's pain. :) Great job! I'm reading something by you after so long... trust me, I actually believe chickens are evil. Amazing! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have ti admit Iat first i didnt like the idea of Vasilis having secondary wives and all but i'm glad it worked out for Malin in the end :D loved your style of writing |
![]() ![]() Sweet, but too short. Also, there were a couple of "okay"s in there that ruined the feel of the story. Try to avoid modern slang when writing stories set in old times. At any rate, it was a fun read, thanks for sharing :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() i really liked this story, so sweet ) thank you for sharing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awe that was cute! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wish there had been more in-depth development of their relationship. I was looking forward to seeing them fall in love. But at least Malin got a happy ending. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I want to start off by saying that I really like this story. Malin is a fun relatable character(A rarity in many BL/slash stories) and though it is a fantasy genre, the plot was fairly realistic(Rulers need heirs to continue their family line regardless of their own sexual orientation). However, I feel that Vasilis needed more development - ex. what does he like to do, what does he hate, what was his childhood like, etc. I'm not really clear how Malin, who is strong-willed and talks about shaping his own destiny, fell in love with Vasilis. It's almost like Malin goes from tolerating the emperor to "falling deeply in love with him" in the course of a few sentences. I kind of wish there was more of an explanation on the dramatic shift in their relationship. But really, I did enjoy this story and I look forward to reading your future work. You have a talent for creating characters that people want to read about. |
![]() ![]() ![]() bah. I liked the story. but Malin is a much stronger person than I could ever be. I think I would rather be dead than have my lover sleep with others, even if I'm the only one he loves. It made me really sad, actually. never mind, i hate this story. ok, not really, but I'm super depressed now, even with the happy ending. didn't make me feel happy at all. it kinda sucked. lol. sorry. |
![]() ![]() ![]() 1) Alright, I admit that I've a soft spot for Malin because he's the underdog. By the way, he kinda reminds me of Cinderella. Cinderella has always been beautiful, but when she's dirty and unkempt thanks to all the chores that she has been doing, others tend to forget that she's a beauty. 2) Hmm, maybe I've a dark sense of humor, because I'm giggling over this-"It was also made clear that, should he get intimidated by the "honor" and freeze up at the crucial moment, there would be guards standing by to "assist" him." 3) I think I've read somewhere online that even if a ruler is gay, he still must have female consort(s). Otherwise, he'll be heir-less, and once he's dead, many people will fight for the throne. Well, I can forgive Vasilis for his polygamy then. |
![]() ![]() ![]() A sweet story. I'm glad Malin found joy in his new life...and Vasilis...hehe. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very nice. The time line of the last bit was odd. I understand an entire story being framed, lots of stories start that way, but the last section was framed as well. If I think of it as a epilogue, it makes sense though. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awh! I really loved this story! XD it was great, and so funny and other points. This was a super special awesome story, you're an awesome writer! d.b |
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