Reviews for Finding Serendip |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I cannot say how cute I found this. _ The summary actually made me laugh, so the story wasn’t exactly what I was expecting. You seem to be a pretty versatile writer, considering your other story, Spontaneity, which I won’t get into since it deserves a review of its own- (Why have I -still- not reviewed that one yet? I can’t understand myself.) Vasilis turned out to be the best character in the story. I thought he was so sweet- like the kind of person who has never done anything wrong in his life. One other thing: nice vocabulary use. It fit for this. Very nice piece, in my opinion. My thanks for writing it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow. that was too sweet. *sighs* i liked it very much! : ) DH |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was a wonderful story. I liked Malin and Vasilis. I liked Lori too. This was a sweet story with just a touch of angst. Also, I've liked it so much that I already read it three or four times already. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You know how you said you hoped this would be a feel-good story for someone else? Hey – hi, yeah, me. And a ton of other people too, you can see. ;-) That was pretty much a given, though, yeah? I mean, you have a name around these parts (FP slash, that is) and everyone seems to adore your humor and beautiful writing. Not that this story was meant to be humorous, but it certainly was beautiful writing. So maybe I should just start off by saying that I thought the concept was awesome – it was what drew me in. ‘Malin, the superfluous but defiant fourth son of a cooper, is invited to the Emperor’s wedding—as the sacrifice.’ is such an awesome line to pull people in with; I know it sparked my interest. Hadn’t heard of anything like it, and I certainly haven’t read anything like it either. Not that there’s some score card anywhere, but points to you for that. Major points. It’s a great story idea. There were so many parts of this story that were lovely. I really like that Malin is such a protector, even as he is faced with his very drastic fate. He is set in a room full of people in the exact same position, and it’s just second-nature for him to comfort a little girl standing near him. [One of the young girls, standing to Malin’s left, began to cry. Without looking up, Malin reached out his hand and took hers, squeezing it lightly until she squeezed back and quieted down. He had been so preoccupied with this that he didn’t notice the head priest had detected his actions and was now returning to the front of the room.] So provocative in this instant, because it just hits so strongly – a sort of sweet moment in a weighted time. I think that was one of the parts that made me really endeared to his character. Each atmosphere/emotion you cultivated and grew with the story was mind-blowing. I loved the feeling I got when Malin was grouped in with all of the other potential sacrifices (a looming danger/anticipation that could lead to anything), and the strong will-power he got when he decided he wouldn’t go down without a fight. I loved the sense of curiosity and comfort from Vasilis, even as Malin was confused and scared out of his wits. I loved that they didn’t immediately fall for each other and that things weren’t so perfectly right with the world, once they were married. I think it works so much better like that, with the conflict and the running away and the tug-of-war until the final ‘happy ending’ we get. I can’t do this one-shot real justice in a review, but I enjoyed reading it so much. I hope you don’t stop writing anytime soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() T_T so beautiful. You have some minor mistakes here and there but nothing that damages this lovely fic. I'm looking forward for more of your writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw! I loved it! It was so cute and sweet. I'm adding it to my favourites _ It's funny how Malin was going to be a sacrifice but ended up as the consort instead. Very good story |
![]() ![]() ![]() A strange story...but it's very good! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I adore this story! *huggles you* Happiness |
![]() ![]() Nice and fluffy, with just a hint of angst. XD I liked how it turned out, and there were very few mistakes. One that I did catch was, in the flashback of him going home two years post the marriage, you said 'He hadn't been back to his village in teh six years since he had been abducted from it.' when, at the time of the flashback, it would have been two years. Otherwise it was good. A little odd on the description part, but as this is a oneshot, I suppose it doesn't matter as much. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So...cute...gah! Thank you so much for writing this! I was feeling so depressed today, and this was exactly what I needed! You're a great writer, Lilias. Keep it up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMFG. This is one of your best. (althought, you have alot of bests)good Spotanaity! |
![]() ![]() OMG I just wanted to tell you I love you! That was just what I needed, and honestly is the only oneshot I have ever read that is an actual story! I loved it, thanx for being a fantastic writer! |
![]() ![]() whoho! nice one! sorry for the short review. but i really need sleep now. great job. please please write more stories! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Gnhh-shanagh-aw! (aka OmigashCUTE!) So adorable, what a sweet story! Made my day! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really liked the whole feeling of this story. I felt that I could feel Malin's emotions, and I liked how he just didn't fall right in love with Vasilis. I thought their new romance was delightfully awkward and realistic. What I felt most, though, was Malin's pain when he realized that Vasilis must sleep with his other wives in order to bear heirs. I very much enjoyed reading this, and I look forward in reading more of your works. |