Reviews for My Universe
SkyFallOuch chapter 1 . 12/16/2007
Wow I could almost feel how it's like. I had a relationship like that but never worked out.

Tbis poem was lovely )
lemke chapter 1 . 8/4/2006
Ciao 'moonsliver86'!

Thankyou for the review for my poem, 'Melody of Mine'.

Your poem, 'My Universe', is absolutely amazing. Though I can't exactly empathise with its words, my best friend would appreciate its meaning, so I may I ask permission to print it out show it to him?

It is so very succinct in what you are trying to say. I particularly found that the line 'Revolving around the same sun' is very powerful in evoking the conflict in time and space. You can be very close in relative terms, but unbelievably far away once you want to close the distance.

Though I am hesitant, I must point out that in the second stanza, 'hopless' would probably read better as 'hopelessness', unless you had another reason for keeping it that way.

Excellent piece, keep up with the greating writing.
Johana chapter 1 . 1/18/2006
*sighs* This is how I feel sometimes... Long-distanced relationships can be a pain in the behind, but every letter is all the more sweet when you can't be with that person.

Good job! I like it :)