Reviews for Cannot Stand
hmm something chapter 1 . 1/23/2006
'with love' surprised me. I didn't know what to the think the poem was about (it sounded like being sick, or the woes of old age, for a moment) but it certainly wasn't love.

I liked your descriptions - 'sandpaper in your throat' sounds painful. o_o

- Chace
Everworld chapter 1 . 1/22/2006
Oh, my god. I wish I could fave this, but I have too many. Dammit. Damn fictionpress' 30 story limit! Gr. Gosh, I love the way you toy with our expectations of rhyme and rythm in this. It comes off really, really well.

(its all in your headcaused by the feelingof your heart no longer beating)

(with love)

x!
DCLehnsherr chapter 1 . 1/22/2006
Nice poem i love the way it ends the with love in bold just seems so powerful. I am unsure as to what it is describing though it reminds me of a panic attack, i'm not sure if there is such a meaning behind it, i'm just the type to try and find such things where it doesn't exist.

All in all this is good well done _