|Reviews for Legend of Emeralds|
| ShadowGal chapter 5 . 2/14/2006
Well, I saw in your profile that you're a Wilde fan, and this certainly has the occasional touch of his voice. Perhaps it's mainly the time setting that does it? Or perhaps not.
At any rate, I'm thrilled that I still have one more chapter to read... And upset, because I have -only- one more chapter to read. *sighs* Ah well. Here I go all the same.
| ShadowGal chapter 4 . 2/14/2006
*dies* Such a cute chapter! You had me grinning all the way through, and I was giggling by the time I read those last few paragraphs. Excellent job!
| ShadowGal chapter 3 . 2/14/2006
Lovely chapter thus far, though I have noticed a minor typo.
"...but it was thickly streaked (beyond her age) with sliver that the delicate lace cap could not hide, and that made her seem like a white ghost."You typed 'sliver' instead of 'silver,' and I thought I'd point that out. My other comment for this sentence pertains to the "and that made her" part. I don't know exactly why, but those four words seem out of place. Maybe it's their tone? I'm not sure, but I thought I'd say something all the same.
Before I move on to actually commentary, I have one other... criticism, I suppose, though it's really just something I want to point out. I've always been taught that you you end dialogue with a comma when you have a further modifier outside of the quotation marks, and a period when you don't. You've done the opposite in your story, and I was just curious to know if there's a reason why.
Now, as for commentary...
I adore Katherine already! She makes me smile. I'm glad to see and learn more about David's family life, and I'm still in love with your writing style. There were a few spots where a word or phrase seemed slightly out of place, but I'm not sure how to fix them and thus won't point out anything specific. Great job so far, though!
| ShadowGal chapter 2 . 2/14/2006
Once again, the word "charming" springs immediately to mind as I read this story. "Charming" and "delightful." Apparently your characters are already having their way with my word choices. *smiles* Lovely chapter. *goes on to read more*
| ShadowGal chapter 1 . 2/14/2006
Heh. Charmingly amusing first chapter; I'm glad to see that there are several more posted already, so I don't have to wait for ages to see how your story is shaping up. I didn't find any mistakes in this first chapter, and that in and of itself is quite refreshing. *keeps reading*
| Pivoine chapter 5 . 2/11/2006
Another chapter! I'm so happy! and I wonder how the relationship between Philip and David will develop!it's a angst story, isn't it? I wonder if there will be a lot of angst! don't make me cry too hard (however, I like to cry too...)! I'm always waiting for the next chapter, my dear girl!
| Archipelago chapter 1 . 2/3/2006
interesting story. I love slash so much so I'll probably be reading more of this.
| Pivoine chapter 4 . 2/3/2006
YES! THEY HAVE TO DANCE TOGETHER! er...and I'm relieved that you won't give up this story! an update once a week! great! hehe and you've no idea how happy your story makes me! thanks for your kind reply! keep up the good work!
| Cherise chapter 3 . 1/28/2006
What's the time period for this story/ It seems like an earlier time period. And I sort of understand a little bit of David's quietness and reclusiveness now.
| Pivoine chapter 3 . 1/27/2006
You've updated! I'm so happy! thank a lot! you know i was afraid you gave up on that story! so thank you again! that chapter is really interesting and i am very curious to know how the story will evolve! and i love angst! I LOVE YOU! -sigh- and I've to wait for the next chapter...i hope you'll update soon...anyway I'll wait...please continue! it's a very gripping story!
| Pivoine chapter 2 . 1/22/2006
hehe it's an interesting story and I want to see more of it so...I hope you'll update soon, don't you? it's a very promising start...