AH that's just pure evil doing that to me...UPDATE SOON lol :)

like I said in my e-mail, sorry it took me so long... I worked night shifts all week and was exhausted so I usually went straight to bed... I open all week this week so I can edit as soon as I get home from work... Shouldn't take me so long for the next one, I promise!

Anyways, good chappie! Can't wait to see who was the one who whacked her over the head! 'Til next chappie sweetie! )

you can't use grammar at all speech marks and youre going from 1st person to 2nd to 3rd

Okay so my 'puter has been acting up and I hadn't had a chance to review. I hardly need to tell you that I think this is good since I try to compliment you when I send you back my edits. lol but here I am, leaving a review anyway...

Alex is obviously the biggest perv by far. Not to mention being cocky... Ah, but it adds such dramatic flair...

As always, good schtuff and I can't wait 'til you send me the next chappie! 'Til then! )

o, this is weird, but i like it!

Aww cute end of the chapter ] Lovely chapter, like always. Yeah I know I need to put stories up lol hopefully soon.

lol Yes I will keep on reveiwing, ohh I don't have any stories up at this moment. No worries about reading mine. I might get to it later, I have some written just to lazy to write them up. Anyway great chapter, can't wait to see what happens at the party ]

OMG...an absolutly amazing chapter once again! LOL...Alex...I wonder wats goin to happen, I feel as though summin bad is goin to happen at de Haloween party or around then! I am soo excited for the next chapter! This one roxed! I adore this story...literally! _ alexa xox

Okies, things are a little clearer now than in the first draft... One thing I noticed, and it's probably my fault 'cause i probably didn't highlight it so you'd catch it, was the following:

Alex said, getting up. (Okay, just wondering, when did he ever sit down? I assumed he was still standing like everyone else.)

Like I said, I probably didn't highlight it so it's most likely my fault.

Anyhoo, such a good chappie... The intro to Alex for Helena is excellent. He's sneaky and evil but everyone thinks he's super hot... my favorite kind of bad guy. Can't wait to see what all happens in the next chappie! Keep up with the good schtuff! )

it's a good story but it was sort of confusing trying to figure out weather she was talking or not, could you please try and put quotation marks in the future?

Again, really good, but loaded with mistakes! Ugh, I can't beleve all of them. Please insert them in the next chapters if you havn't allready, and fix all your grammer. I don't mean to sound like an English teacher, but you really do need some help on those two.

It's very good, although there are a lot of mistakes. The first thing was that you didn't write it in third person style. You use words like 'says' which will make the reader uncomfertable. I suggest you change it. On the line starting off, "I had a feeling you were listening..." you forgot to put anoter quotation mark at the end, so it was confusing as to where the diolouge ended. In the line three up, you spelled here as hear, and forgot a comma after, hunters. That seemed to be a repeating trait in the peice, fix it. I think that it's a good story and a good concept, but you really need to clean it up.

I likies the little additions you made after my edits. Added a little more oomph to it. It's going to be interesting to learn what part Lord Alexander is going to play in the story. Sinister leader maybe? I guess we'll just have to wait and see... hee hee hee...

Of course, as always good schtuff and I'll be waiting for you to send me the next chappie! )

lol My hopes are staying up ] Great chapter, can't wait for the next.

Wonderful! A little bit of a jump though from Helena liking Vaughn to calling him a bastard though, especially when she just felt sorry for how he was changed. At least thats how I saw it.

Anyway, fantastic work, as everyone else has said some grammatical errors and in the earlier chapters some issues with pronouns, to the point of being more than slightly confusing, but other than that interesting setup. I look forward to seeing more, please update soon and as often as you can!