heyya~I just started reading this story and succesfully hav read all the chapters! hehe! LOL! I really enjoy it...sum little gramatic errors r in the txt...but truth be told we all make them! LOL! Over all i absolutly enjoyed ur story...i really like the title, characters and well everything about it! LOL! Helena can be slightly bitchy...although thats wat gives her character attitude! Its very interesting and i would like to read on! PLEASE UPDATE SOON! alexa xox

Very interesting story, I hope she falls in love with Vaughn..Anyway update soon.

Like I told you before... awesome chappie! I'm so looking forward to receiving chapter nine. I'd love to see Helena bitch slap William but only b/c he deserves it. Poor Vaughny-bear... to be rejected like that...

As always, good schtuff! Keep up the good work and I'll be chomping at the bit for the next chappie! )

Okay, just a minor detail that I thought you should know... We only have like 8 pints of blood in our bodies, not gallons. I don't know where you got that information but I thought you'd want to know before a lot of people started harping on you about it...

I like seeing how Vaughn was made a vamp. Very nice. The author's note about Emma was kind of a real spoiler. It would have been to your advantage to have alluded to their relationship as brother and sister in the chappie and then totally reveal it in the next chapter. But hey, you don't have to listen to me.

Still a good chappie regardless... Exciting as well... Hope you update soon! If you need a beta-reader to edit for you i'd be glad to do it, just let me know. I'll be waiting for your next update! )

Hmm... it's good overall but I think you gave away too much about Vaughn's past too soon... I'm not complaining or anything, just a suggestion...

I can't wait to see who he attacked and how he became a vamp. Too interesting to miss for sure! Blood lust can be such a biotch... hee hee hee.

Anyways, a few errors here and there but it's cool as always. I'm not gonna be like some peeps and nitpick schtuff. I know no one or their pc's are perfect. After all, I have screwed up translations for a couple of my stories b/c I didn't have a human translator and had to use a machine. Poo Poo on those who nitpick. They need their hands slapped for that.

Good stuff and keep writing no matter what other schmucks out there might say!

It's good so far, though I think the 'flashback/end flashback' kinda interupts the flow, but it's nothing too serious. A few mispelled words and a bit choppy, but it was a good read. Keep up the good work.

CK

Punctuation! Especially commas. Use them.

A little short but good. Roxi just wanted to get Helena lost.. What a bitch.

I also am pissed they let her leave.

Pretty good if a little short... still a few errors here and there but nothing big so i'm not gonna get anal and tell you what they are...

My fav. character is probably Vaughn but just b/c he's so sweet/lovable all that stuff ya know...

Keep on writing!

Interesting story but alot of grammar errors.. And you use the wrong tense sometimes

great story so far, interesting even if this chapter was short. you're doing a great job so far and it might have been somewhat hard to follow but i managed. ;)

however, i don't think you should only update a story only IF you get a certain amount of reviews. writing should be something you want to do, not something only to get praise for.

great chapter, and i hope you update whether or not you get the reviews you want!

~nicole

hmm... a love interest for Jasmine... interesting...

Disappointed that it was so short but it's okay. Makes me look forward to the next chapter even more :-D

Love the hint btw... Keep up the good work!

Understandable to have mistakes and I don't judge stories based on them. Some of them make the story line a little bit confusing but I like the characters so I'll stick it out. Vaughn seems like he's totally in love with Helena and yet they haven't known each other that long. Or have they?It's been good so far and I'll be sure to check back when I get an email about your next update.

Umm... it's a bit confusing. A lot of mistakes. Might i suggest a spell checker? The story does create a vivid picture in your head, pull off my hat for you on that one.

Very good beginning. A few errors here and there, like "you" instead of "her" and little things like that. Nothing major. I anxiously await where this will go. Hope to see an update on this sometime soon.