This was a great little read! I must stay that all of your characters were very enjoyable and I did find myself falling in love with them! There were some things in here that weren't believable, but, hey, it's fiction, so what else can you expect? Overall, a good read!

Even though I hate Riley, I was kind of upset about her car wreck. I hope she makes another appearance in this. I liked the ending of this chapter and hope that Justin and Alyssa work it out.

I love this! Your writing is so smooth and your characters are so likeable! I've read a lot of you one shots and decided to give one of your novels a chance. I don't regret it!

YOU ARE MAGIC! LOVE THE STORY! (L_O_V_E)

nicely stated...

Hi! So I know this is your first story, but I also wanted to let you know its pretty bad...it has the potential to be good but it's seriously unbelievable. Normally, I wouldn't leave a harsh review, just stop reading, but I read your Fateful Friday and I really liked it (I do realize its newer). So I just wanted to point some things out that may help in the future, although based on FF, you have moved away from these issues:

1. The main character is so pathetic its difficult to sympathize with her after awhile (e.g. she lets everyone walk all over her, I mean giving a ride to Riley after the big blow up? That's beyond pathetic. And not confronting Justin at the end of this chapter? Its the same, she's so weak she deserves it at this point.)

2. I also think the relationship "connection" between Alyssa and Justin is unbelievable. Even though it hasn't been blatant yet, its clear Alyssa is supposed to secretly like him and Justin's supposed to like her back. However, based on everything that's been said in previous chapters, they're barely acquaintances, any "love" would be totally shallow at this point.

Like I said earlier, I think there's potential for this story. And I'm sure you're also aware of the shortcomings of this story. Nevertheless, I had to point the two biggest ones out. I also can't wait to read your stories that were written after this and FF because I want to see how much farther you've progressed!

Such a cute story! Awesome work, keep it up :D xx

That was one heck of a story :) I felt like I could empathize with Alyssa, I mean, her personality and mine are not that different. Although, her life story is just that bit different than mine. Anyways, that's not the point. Did I even have a point to begin with? Yeah, Alyssa's train of though is really contagious, at least to me it is. Oh yeah, hope you keep writing! :D

I have sharp nails..would that be enough to claw out Riley's and Courtney's faces?

Alyssa, don't worry, I talk to myself too. True story.

Also..

BOOYAH! Way to go Alyssa! Finally standing up to your bestfriend! I don't know how she managed to put up with Riley's attitude for so long, I'm sure I would've cracked the first two months.. So anyways, liking the story :D Apologies for only reviewing now..

I really love this story act actually I like every story of yours that I've read.

I jumped up in my seat when she introduced herself. My name's Alyssa too! D

Alyssa is a really hard character to like...i'm sorry if this is harsh but its making it very difficult to read the story. She is so annoying because she doesn't have a backbone, and she lets Riley walk right over her and she can't recognize when a guy likes her when she should stand up for herself. Plus, no sane person actually talks to themselves out loud when other people are around. Therefore it is that combination that is making this story not as enjoyable as it could be.

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Hey there, I don't know how your writing is going, since it looks like you aren't really on fp much anymore, but I just wanted to encourage you to keep it up! I read End of the Day a long time ago and I barely remember it, but just came back and am only on chap 2 of this.

I don't review every chapter of a completed story so I thought I would take this opportunity to tell you something I can say to only a VERY few authors on fp: I love your writing! Your writing is funny, well-written and grammatically correct.

To be honest, this is so rare that it has now become an anomaly to me. So, keep writing. I'm sure it will get better and better - you obviously have a lot of natural talent there. I hope it takes you far.