|Reviews for Watching the Stars|
| Pandakun84 chapter 1 . 10/8/2006
Cool! I really like this! Great job!
| Maisha Mafuriko chapter 1 . 1/31/2006
Kinda different the way of the placement of the bold italics...different can be good.
Gives me to ponder that so oft outdoors when viewing the stars and yet here, about to drift off into slumber, viewing the stars from indoors...I like it!
| With Rhyme and Reason chapter 1 . 1/27/2006
Every poem should have a point, a deeper meaning, a complex undergrowth. I wonder if you thought about that while you were composing this piece. It seems to me that you might have some special connection with lying in bed at night, watching the stars-but why should the reader care? Poetry to invoke a feeling in the reader which makes him/her really invest his/herself in the poem. When I finished this poem, I was left thinking, "Okay. And?" I think you probably get my point.
Another thing that bothered me in this poem is that you insert freaky bolds and italics where they have no place. If you feel that the words you bolded and italicized are "more special" than all the other words, that's good for you. But you, the writer, obviously know they're special. Personally, if I HAD to use weird typography, I'd put the entire poem in italics (no bolds, mind you), in an attempt to make it seem somewhat mystical.
I didn't love this poem. I think it's much too personal for a piece of literature. No, it's the worst poem I've ever read. And it's not even NEAR being the worst poem I've ever read. It just bothers me a bit, because I couldn't feel a meaning.
I liked your poem "Wishing" much better.
| brokendreams21 chapter 1 . 1/25/2006
Cool. Nice emphasis. It is really good. Short and sweet. And no rhymes? Yay for freeverse! Very cute poem! Great job!
| kdoll chapter 1 . 1/25/2006
the subliminal message is original... the whole poem is cute.