|Reviews for curves|
| Artemis Anderson chapter 1 . 8/26/2007
| With Rhyme and Reason chapter 1 . 1/25/2006
While this poem pretends to be emotional, I think that you as the poet lacked the high amount of emotion required. It's a romantic poem-there's definitely some love here. But it's also a lusty poem-a very overplayed topic in contemporary literature.
Your lack of capitalization was probably meant by you to create a style "all your own." It's not original. It looks sloppy and rather lazy. Try using capital letters, and readers will take you more seriously. Honestly, it's the little things that matter the most.
The thing I like about this poem was its shape. I usually don't cheer for weird typographcy, but I like how your poem was curvy in its image. Nice job there.
You have potential, but you could definitely use some literary discipline. Try a definite structure. It'll do you good, I promise.
Much luck to you,Julie