She had better be able to save him! This story rocks!

Aw! :( I love the scene at the end, it makes me so sad. I hope that Aden gets out okay. I can't believe he said I love you back to Kyla! YAY! haha They love eachother. :D Anyways, keep up the amazing work!

Dark-FreEdoM

finally

I love this story, and it's going on my favorites. But this chapter was sad since Aden's only friend betrayed him. It was really emotional and had me tearing in some parts. _ kinda pathetic on my part... but it's really good!

Anyway, I shall continue with this story tomorrow, since it is currently 12 am.

Should have gotten rid of the ponytail, Aden... *Sigh*

Wow, awesome chapter.

You can really see Aden's care for Kyla coming through. Nicely done.

Wow. I can't actually see how you're going to get them out of this. I'm impressed.

PLease update soon!

Hang on, you haven't updated in like a month! *Growls* Not happy. Please please please pretty please update soon!

"I wanted to be in love with him, but trying to push myself to feel something I didn't wasn't a good idea." She's become very responsible, i like that.

I think I said this in the last review, but you've managed to do the character changes very well. I'm impressed. They're gradual, and seem right. :D

Wow, the headhunter... was definitely unexpected. I think my eyes almost popped out of my head (Not pleasant).

Oh God, it was a nightmare. Thank god for that. I was actually scared there.

Being pernickety here, but I think these sentences would go better the other way around: "Aden kept looking back and scowling at him. Apparently, he agreed."

The nightmare scene outside was really cute. But you didn't overdo it, which was lovely.

Oh my god the SUSPENSE! Evil people. Ah well, I'm not complaining, I can read the next chapter now!

Okay, so I didn't get a chance to finish this chapter the other day. I'm back now!

Time for one chapter today, then I'll have to catch up tomorrow maybe.

"wing it," doesn't really sound like something the princess would say - it jumped out as an unlikely choice of words.

"I'm so spoiled." You're doing her transformation very well - it's beautifully gradual. Really lovely.

"the cloak lied" *Lay.

""Stop it!" I yelled, yanking my arm out of his." Oh, lurvely confidence! I like.

Hmm... I don't know, but this flirty side of the princess seems to counter my first impressions of her - backed up by the way she behaved with Aden at the beginning - that she was the pure epitome of innocence and properness. ( couldn't quite remember the right word, hehe.)

Although I suppose it could be a hidden side of her coming through, it doesn't feel quite right.

aww, the end of the chapter is lovely. Really nice. Awesome to see her taking some responsibility. :D

I like this new side of her.

Keep writing, I'll be back soon!

He likes her! He likes her! He likes her! *Bounces excitedly*

That was so cute!

Aww. I lovehate how you drag out the suspense by making her really annoying (to Aden, I just think she's funny) right after he begins to realise he likes her.

That's a real skill you have, by the way - making a character really annoying to someone else without the reader being annoyed by them. Kudos!

"Why was it always a fruit stand that I ran into?" Hehehe - I love him.

Wow - awesome twist. Absolutely fantastic.

How did she find him! And wow - love this line:

"“How do you feel?” she asked, smiling encouragingly. Tired. Sore. Hungry. Lost. Frustrated. Upset. Hurt. Abandoned. Haunted. Betrayed…

“I’m fine…” I answered. “Just a little worn out.”" Awesome. Me likie. :D

"When we opened the door, Macyn was attempting to juggle some apples." Hehehe. Nice touch.

Nice chapter. I like how even though Macyn did what he did, you managed not to make him hated. Does that make sense? I quite liked his character - I don't want to hate him!

I can read one more chapter, then I have to go... :'(

"I pretended that it was because he fancied me, but I knew it was just for safety's sake." Aww, she's not so naive any more... I'm kinda sad that she's had to grow up. I wish she didn't.

Aw, they had their first fight!

And they had a proper conversation!

Wow. *Sigh*

Sorry this is such a short review. This happens when I have a lot to read - I get so involved in the story I can't think straight to analyse! :D

Nice chapter!

"I am not buying the princess from you!" Genius. I love your characters.

Nice twist - I didn't realise he'd meant to ditch her (possibly because I'm a bit out of touch.)

Usually I don't like the POV change thing, but you do it really well here - you use it properly. I like it. Kudos.

"Just my luck. She’s finely bearable, hell, even likeable, when I’m undressing her." Brilliant. Lovely tension through this bit by the way, I think my heart actually started to beat a little faster. :D

There were a couple of examples through this chapter of grammar mistakes in conversation - from what I remember it was fine before, so maybe it's jsut a slip - here are a couple of examples:

“Where are we going?" She pressed. ["where are we going?" she pressed.]

“I don’t know.” I answered simply. ["I don't know," I answered simply.]

I like how Aden's character flaws come through clearly at the end of the chapter, very nicely done.

Altogether a nicely written chapter!

Right. I got incredibly busy for a while, but I'm back now to read and review!

Couldn't leave this awesome story now, could I?

"My eyes flew around, trying to drink it all in. I so rarely got to see the city." This was interesting. Nice detail.

"Who, might I add, is one nice piece of-" Hahahahahahahahaha.

Oh, i love the creativity of Aden's various titles. Pure genius.

"Macyn's junk tried to eat me!" Hahahahahahahaha.

"What's 'foreplay'?" Genius.

"our hands fit perfectly together." Aww!

"I gladly curled into him." Lovely description.

Lovely chapter. Really. I have very little to criticise about your writing!

YAY! AN ADEN CHAPTER :D! I love it! haha And yes Kyla has a fan, I'm quite stubborn myself so maybe thats why I like her.. hmm. Anyways another amazing chapter, as usual. I can't wait to see what happens with the Kings of The Underworld.. oh and the plot thickens Aden has seemed to grow quite fond of Kyla! AH! I love love love romance stories like there. Wonderful job! :) I'll make sure to keep reading this story, it's a keeper

Of course I liked it- it was nice to see another chapter from Aden's point of view. I enjoyed all the hints of romance- i'm in quite a romantic frame of mind now, i wouldn't mond meeting someone who wanted to protect me! The thing that always amazes me (apart from the fact that you both have quite a similar style of writing so it flows so well) is that both of you write the characters so that they seem the same from whichever pov. Most of people have a really distinctive writing style from their friends- i know i go on about this on EVERY review, but you two really are well matched. As always, looking forward to the next one, i reckon a bit of fantasy is 'good for ones constitution' now and again- thanks for providing my allowance of it!

*gasp* he has a conscience.

I have been enjoying your story! I think it's awsome that you guys write as a team! Keep up the good work, and I just LOVE Aden. I hate to say this but Kyla reminds me of me...well I was wondering, in one of the later chapters you have Kyla swear. Is that cuz she is getting more and more worldly or was it an accident? I'm going to keep reading as you