Oh! I just love this story...it is fantastic! I love how ya'll took a pretty well used subject and made it into a fantastic, interesting, and colorful story! The way you write is just fasntastic.

You know what the great thing about FP is? When you complain to an author about a certain aspect of your story, they give you very helpful advice...Like Myrika gave me a whole speil about how to build intereting characters...If I keep this up, the next story I write might actually be interesting enough to read...

more is all ive got to say although more description of what the people looke like would be great

Holy crap, another great installment on the part of Kyla! I love it, I love it,I love it! That bastard, Bricen, has got a serious ass-whoopin' coming up I hope... creepy old men are scrrary! (and who should know better than me? after all, i always attract old fat mexicans...) I also read the...my hands smell like balloons... previous chapter, and I liked it too. This story is really progressing! Great work! Loves! Archer

I really like this! I think its really ingenious the way you both have alternated the chapter writing- it could so easily go wrong, but you've both done it Excellently! I like the way that the characters are developing as well- Kyla's not uqite as prissy and annoying as she was at first- she's becoming a bit more streetwise- and its gradual, so its realistic. ANd Aden's so cute. I mean- i practically fancy him myself. Looking forward to the next installment! I'm impressed at the way you've both maintained the standard of your writing- i'm definitely going to keep an eye on this one :)

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Aw, this story is so adorable. I feel bad for Kyla, because it seems like Aden has no interest in her at all in a lover-ish kind of way. But I suspect that that will come in time.

This story has had me riveted ever since the arcer pointed it out to me! you guys are doing a fantastic job with the plot, making sure it doesn't hurry or drag, and I love the point of view changes throughout. Keep up the good work!

Q

Great job! Kyla is definitely not as naive. I can't believe Macyn did that! I mean, I thought that he would be like Aden's best friend and they'd adopt each other as real brothers or something in the end...wow. What a great twist!

Man I love this story...And your chapters are just long enough to be interesting and actually cover something and just short enough to keep readers coming back for more...A skill I uh...apparently, have not yet aquired...And probably never will at this rate...Although, I suppose having a fun and interesting story helps as well...

Great story! I just started reading it and finished it off at the most recent chapter today. This chapter is very good. At least Kyla isn't as annoyingly naive is she was before. Update soon plz! :D

This is great! I like this chapter; Kyla doesn't seem to be AS naive and Aden seems finally to be letting a little of his soft sideo ut.

Lovely as usual! Again, some verb confusion as you used "lie" instead of "lay"... um. I like how she relives the moment with Charlie. And I really like how it is recognized that a princess is pretty much ignored and HAS to become good at manipulated and coercing people to pay attention to her. The comparison of their two lives was wonderful. Haven't got much more to say, except I can't wait for the next installment! Good work! - LOVES Archer

Aww! The ending was so sweet!

I love it no matter how long it takes to update...Although, I think you can tell I like it since I've reviewed for every chapter so far...What can I say? I thouroughly captivated...