Reviews for Breathing In Toxic Redemption |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Please updateeeee! I really wanna see what happens!...I love the name Charley btw :3 |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, I'm aware that this is, like, three years old. But it seems really charming and sweet and it would be so lovely if you continued it. Just saying. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() When I learned that Subway, incredibly dense Irish boy's name was Christian? I couldn't help but to think: Jesus fucking Christ. LOL. Very good, I liked. And I'd especially love to read more, if you ever decided to write more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() raindrops on roses and girls in white dresses and sleeping with roaches...! fuckin LOVE that song! it's a good song. i think i like Robbie and Clay better, but maybe it's just 'cause they're more comfortable around eachother. i don't really like awkwardness. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, I like this! I hope you continue it-you have a really nice style. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Peanut butter is awesome! But, um, yes...reviewing. About having more diverse characters: right now, Charley is still a sterotype druggie type. Very 2D. But I guess he hasn't been in the story all that much, so that's ok. |
![]() ![]() what a great start. are you going to continue? loved the comment about wax wings, was it reference to greek myth? the angst, the angst. update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I so thought this was a one-shot til the obvious not-ending and the author's note. So wait... that means there'll be another chapter? *puppy dog eyes* Be-cause another chapter sound like a good idea to me. I like the random hair thing. I like the random everything, really. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really want to read what happens next. I love your writing, its eloquent so its always fun to read... or sometimes just depresing, but really good. Ill keep waiting for those updates |
![]() ![]() ![]() Who doesn't know Clay and Robbie? me wuv them! i think it's great though that your trying to branch out and expand yur horizons (hehe me also luv cliches!) go you! NOW UPDATE FOR CLAY! hehe I'm not a rapid fangirl...er... |
![]() ![]() Aww, now I'm sad that you didn't continue this story. Oh well. Maybe you will finish it after finishing SMC. Heh, naive, innocent, obsessed gay Irish boy Hispanic bad boy who we don't know the orientation of hot stuff! Oh yes, this story has possibility. It has potential energy, but still lacks the kinetic energy to go places! Wow, my chemistry teacher would be so proud. I'm such a science geek. Okay, well, ttyl. And please update SMC soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() For some reason I thought this was a one shot but then I read the bottom and didn't think that anymore...interesting, no? No. Okay. Well anyways, a few spelling errors but I think I already know you don't give a rat's ass. :) Which is good. I wish I had that attitude. Especially the days that I want to type 'than' instead of 'the' and mess up simple easy three letter words... Okay, let's start on characterization. I love the names…I think it’s funny, “Christian” and “Jesus”…whoops I mean “Charley”! Chris is agreeable enough, he seems a little bit of a pushover but bratty and cocky at the same time. I guess it’s when he feels cornered or needs to prove something. Jesus, on the other hand, seems very rough and cold. I think it would be really interesting to watch the walls come down and see how close he can really get to Chris. Will he give it all up, or be guarded and wary most of the time? It would be very frustrating for Chris. And Chris seems like the type who might give up too quickly. So it will be interesting… Don’t worry, I know who Rob-cabob and Clay are! So I don’t suck. Hurrah. But I’ll forget them if you don’t update…;-;…I know I’m mean and annoying and heartless and stupid and you should just murder me now, but I want to see more of Robbie and Clay! In all meanings too, dammit! I will use whatever means necessary to achieve my goal. Like review. I give you reviews, you give me chapters. Deal? Deal. And idgaf if I just answered for you. Here are your flowers…*\*/*\*/* …they are good flowers so don’t yell at me…;-;…I adore you! |
![]() ![]() ![]() uh.. whiskers on kittens are silly. the story looks really good... sighs i also have a weird thing for hands / fingers ... lol, but i usually go for long fingers... dont ask me why. would like 2 know a bit more about main charecter whats - his - face christin ... ha ha bloddy hilarous, christian and jeasus... well charely acutlly... have you ever seen a movie called apolyclipse now? its good, theres a famout quote from it - but charely don't surf - egads whatever, kepp it up, please update p.s. good idea 2 keep chapter short, that way we get more |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMFG. That made me giggle. My friend Heidi ish reading it now too. I'm in school. Ha. Anyways... yeah. OMFG. - |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay! I love experiments! And I do agree with you on the fact that some of your characters do follow same character traits as Robbie & Clay, well more specifially the story with orange eyeliner? The only similar thing here I think is Christian's thinking mind and Robbie's thinking mind. But it's kinda different. Robbie is more of a clueless what the fuck type thing, that rmables but the rambles confuse each other. But Chritian's is more of an innocent clueless ramble, and the rmables don't run into each other. He just goes with it. I hope that made some sense. But I like Christian, and how he can't stop to seemingly obsess about Charley's hands. I like that. And Charley himself seems to be a pretty cool, different style character. I like him. Maybe more than Christian. I also think it was cool how their names are Christian and Jesus. I thought it was pretty funny. And the best of this so far is where it is set up! I can picture it so well! It just makes a for a great location. Hm. . .Well. Good luck. And Update soon! |