i totally loved this story! XD

how is this lame?! she announced that she's pregnant! i am always happy about baby news!

did he hear the confession or not?!

i can't wait for when she confesses!

i love the way their relationship is going!

they're making progress! yay!

i have to say that i love the main heroine! she is strong, smart, brave, and not afraid to say what she thinks. plus i think that thanks to jared, they are making a new break into their relationship. the things she quotes makes sense too.

the chapter are so short. i like them though. :)

Awww so sweet. First as enemies, second as strangers, third as friends, fourth as loverd and fifth as a family.. Perfect happy ending :D xx

nice.

I finishedthe story and enjoyed it a lot! So I scrolled to the top to go onto your profile to see if you had any other great stories to tell but I faltered! You see I've read many of your stories- maybe all of them ever- and I smiled and thought 'Trust Clavel to make such a great story!'

Oh! Minor punctuation and grammar mistakes! 'where' in most cases was meant to be 'were.' some of your sentences were muddled a bit... But who cares? I corrected it in my mind when I was reading!

I really like this story. I read a manga that almost has the same story as this: .

:D

Gotta read some more! Good luck on your stories!

I liked this story. At first, i thought that there would be a love triangle between Jacen, Darla, and Jared since Darla became close to Jared first... So anyway, i just wanted to tell you that i really like this story! Keep on writing! :) and goodluck on your future works!

Hello! I know this was written quite a while ago (I'm not even sure if you still check for reviews) but I just stumbled across it because of your story "My Life in Black & Blue" which was, by the way, awesome. It's easy to tell your writing skills have greatly improved.

And now on to this story specifically. Overall, the plot was good. I totally understood the whole "arranged marriage love relationship thing. I'm generally great at distinguishing the plot, but I think someone without a brain in their head could have got where you were coming from. This was an easy read that I finished in one sitting. However, I think the plot moved too fast for me. One minute they're newlyweds. The next she's opening up to his brother. This I think was very well-paced, but afterwards as we start to move in to their relationship more, it started going too fast for me. It was like one minute they're cold and distant towards each other, then BAM! They start kissing and opeining up. He's hesitant about becoming her lover then suddenly BAM! She's pregnant with his child. It was kind of weird for me how Jacen/Darla nonchalantly say "we started kissing" or "I'm pregnant with his child" and then suddenly explain how this came about. Sometimes the explanations were kind of vague. I feel like a lot of stuff happened out of our eyes that we probably should have seen. I think you could have used important events in the story, like Darla's grandfather's death, to have them open up more visibly towards each other.

All-in-all, I think it was a good story. I'm just trying to give you suggestions so your work can improve. I won't mind what you do with my advice, I just want to tell you I enjoyed the story, and maybe if you get the time you can check out some of mine in return. I'm hopefully returning to writing very soon.

Last one. At least for today. Fall in Love. Thats the best love. I dont know why, but Im still sad. They did fight so long and lost so many. I hate war. Its stupid and gruel.