Wow. This was... powerful. Very emotional, and I love the way you conveyed the feel using the italics.

"You lost her boy."

I love-love this story. Great job. :D

Psychological. I like this.

Hiya, I read this story a couple of days ago but the stupid internet here kept crashing. Ho hum. Anyway, I really like this one shot, and (weirdly) all of the italics in it. They give it a nice rhythm, I think, as well as giving it more oomph. I really love the way that this turns around at the end too - that the guy who made the mistake's the one who this is going to really affect in the end and not the girl. Love all of the description too - very vivid, and the repetition of 'don't give yourself away' is so effective! Great work!

This is really sad, you should continue this...i loved it

Wow, this was simply amazing. "you'll be the best liar in history and she'll be the biggest regret." Just amazing.

Thank you for the nice comment on my little diddy, it was very heartening. However, mine is nothing compared to this. Brilliance. I loved it, the whole thing.