Reviews for Lost
Chaotic0ne chapter 1 . 3/24/2006
I find it humorous how we always write first-person stories through the eyes of characters of the same sex... I've tried writing through the eyes of a female, and it isn't easy. Less identifiable for me... What was I talking about? Right, the review. I liked it- the belief in ephemeral happiness, the lack of trust in the intent of others... Very cool. Keep it up.
For What Its Worth chapter 1 . 3/6/2006 there going to be any more?
MoonlightWriter16 chapter 1 . 3/4/2006
I think I know how this girl feels. Shuting the mind off, but it being her refuge. And not wanting to beleive when someone tells the whole-hearted truth. I know. -Moonlight
chrisertastic chapter 1 . 3/3/2006
The battle of the mind and heart. Wonder who will win. twas great, its short, but it gave you everything you needed to know. i like it.
Sam F chapter 1 . 2/23/2006
very, very short. I'm writing this from a class, so I don't have much time. Perhaps I'll post a play I'm writing that has similar thoughts. Heh. But. The fragment seems to dwell a bit much on hopelessness ... again, too blunt and over-dramatic [though more, that perhaps has an explanation as to why her mind is in this state, and other quibbles] would be highly beneficial.
SilentStones chapter 1 . 2/15/2006
This is very good. It's small and simple, but has a refreshing style that isn't too heavy. And it's extremely relatable which is awesome. Great work!


PS: thank you very much for the review
ADSpencer chapter 1 . 2/8/2006
Nice piece! I'm assuming this is flash fiction (one-shot). Anyhow, it portrayed emotion very well.
none of burt's beeswax chapter 1 . 2/2/2006
Nicely done. I like how you infuse the little girl's thoughts into the narration.h
a lonely september chapter 1 . 2/2/2006
this is so realistic, because it happens too/so much. & you wrote it so well. : )
pieces chapter 1 . 2/2/2006
But doesn't some part of everybody who thinks they're in love really wonder if they are or not?Sex complicates things, of course, and I guess that's why "Pleasure" kind of sticks out in this any event, it's wicked good. And very real, which makes it tangible, which makes it ... something you don't see every day. Very nice.
for keeps chapter 1 . 2/2/2006
Powerful, you really have no idea how great and full that was for such a short story. It was a quick easy read. Very deep with many layers too it, you can relate, and thats what makes this story absoulute magic. Keep it up. :)