this is a good story, a good plot, but you seem to be having trouble with your grammar and sentence structure. It might be a good idea if you have someone proof-read your work before you update on the net, simply to get the flow of your story back into balance. Other than that, I'm interested in where you might be taking this.

just happy that you have posted..well anyways wonder what jake taking lacey?..well anyways going to head out then..so peace out yall..bye-bye then...

i wanna know why she said that its wouldn't worked out huh?... here...well so loving it...just can't wait the next chapter to post...anyways need to head out then...so peace out gurl...

that is a great chapter...just hope that lacey won't regret it...wonder what jake is going to do for his reverage...well anyways keep updating girl..so loving it...can't wait the next chapter to post...anyways need to head out..so peace out then...

omg this story is so good that i got addicted to it...O so lacey and jake...maybe going get the hooked up...hahah...just hope that you will post more soon okay..well loving it...can't wait the next chapter to post...hope that you will post the next chapter fast though...anyways need to head out then...well peace out then girl...hope that you will post more soon alright...:D...

damn, nice! i like i like. and i love ddr! please update!

hey this is an awesome story. one thing though is that you change point of view too much. It really is a good story but that one change of keeping to one view would make it a whole lot better. Again great story.